how can i improve this sentence?
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How about "I changed my mind and decided to stay."\n[grin]
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Your second choice is much better. The first is lacking a verb in the "B" part.
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Can you make your point in 3 sentences or less?
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Have someone you know help you form a full sentence and use correct punctuation...I don't have a clue what the hell you just tried to ask!
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None because:\n\n1.) There are robots all around making our lives easier.\n(took out comma)\n\n2.) There are robots all around, which make our lives easier.\n(added comma)\n*Note: This seems to be incorrect, so I will say that the answer MAY be #2, depending on how you were taught English.\n\n3.) There are robots all around; they make our lives easier.\n(changed comma into semicolon)
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This is just a suggestion.  First improve your spelling, and  then learn how to compose grammatically correct sentences.
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imperfect\nSee last sentence, 5th paragraph.
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Just write something sincere.\nThey will like it better.
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I'd make changes in just one sentence:\n\n18. The safety hazard, on the contrary, can be greatly reduced if workers wear rubber gloves. \n\nI hope this helps.
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First thing to do:  Use periods.  They help to end sentences.\n\nSecond thing to do:  Destroy her soul with the power of your inner rectum.
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Thats a lot to try to correct.  Try writing it in Word then doing a grammer and spell check.
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You should have written, "Could you please teach me, or advise me about my grammar mistakes?  My grammar is bad so I want you to correct my grammar if I have made any mistakes."\n\nThis is just a start.  I would recommend that you read and read and read - things like Readers Digest and newspapers should help.  The reading level is not too difficult and they are written using pretty good grammar.  The more you read good clear writing the more your grammar will improve.\n\nI've attached a few websites that should be helpful to you.  Good luck with it.
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Well, the sentence has more issues than just the commas.  "It took a while" and "eventually" are somewhat redundant.  If you want to use both then say, "It took awhile, but he eventually noticed me."
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Your first sentence is a run-on sentence.\n\nBut not to bad.  Clean it up a bit and worry more about your flow.\n\n6 out of 10
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After this sentence, start a sentence with "Moreover,"\n\nThat should do the trick!\n\nHope that helps!
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Could you please make this a little bit more understandable?
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The first and third are correct. The first is in future tense. Still acceptable depending on context of the sentence.