whats rymes with brutal? and makes sense for a poem??
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for a "perfect rhyme" (sounds match exactly):\nfutile, tootle, butyl [though the last is not likely to be useful]\n\nfor an almost perfect rhyme (since the "t" as pronounced in brutal is hard to distinguish from "d", at least in American English dialects!):\nboodle, doodle, feudal, noodle, poodle,  kit and caboodle\n\nor you could try a slightly loose 'near rhyme' in which most of the sounds match (and ones that do not precisely match may still be fairly close):  \nremoval, approval, frugal, bugle\n\neven looser rhyme (depends on the specific poetic lines you are trying to use this in -- you have to test it yourself):   youthful, truthful
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Wow, this poem is something else. By that I mean it is really abstract in its language and in its metaphors. I have a guess on it's meaning, but that is merely a guess. This author is using so much personal experience that it is hard for me as a reader to really connect well with what is being said, but here is my hypothesis:\n\nFirst of all, I think the title "Call It Fear" needs to be kept in mind when reading through the entire poem. The structure and the wording is suggestive of a person who is caught in the panic of fear ("call it an ocean of fear of the dark"). So, it can easily be assumed that this poem is analyzing fear and the essence of fear in the human mind.\n\nThe author has this deep fear, a fear of the dark, or possibly a fear of the unknown. The author is not alone however as she has found someone, referred to as Goodluck, who also has the same fear. They have come together to escape the fear, and their only escape has been found in the music that they have found on the radio, the church music that plays on a lot of stations on Sunday mornings. \n\nThere is also a question of the repeated imagery of "a string of shadow horses kicking and pulling me out of my belly." This image is repeated in the first and third stanzas and is linked to anxiety, the butterfly feeling that everyone gets in the pit of their stomach when they are controlled by fear. The idea of "shadow horses" seems to suggest the idea that death is pulling and tugging at the speaker of this poem, and it is the fear of death that drives the speaker to use music to escape the fear.\n\nThis is my guess on the meaning of the poem. . . I hope it proves helpful!
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well, if u wrote it, CONGRAGULATIONS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!, if not i think this is just a ordinary poem, probably written to impress a lady or something. I have a friend who published poems, and this poem would be an B- or 7.5/10 grade, which would not make it to the poem industry. But as I said, this poem has a lot of rich text that is exceptionally enriching. It takes great skill to write that, and that is why we are not all writers.
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post here, tons of people writing  poetry\n\nhttp://www.eliteskills.com/
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Wonderful poem.\nDont do what you suggest though it wont have the effect you will be hoping for. My suggestion is to talk to her and tell her you wrote this poem abuot her and recite it. Good luck
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you're ok, writing disturbing poems is not an indication that you need help... the cutting is more of a problem... keep writing what you feel and let it out
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It is Nice and you have good ideas how ever work on your grammar and it is kinda choppy when reading a style that can be vary effective if used correctly how ever not vary fitting for a love poem. Keep up the hard work.
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The questioner made a cats limerick,\nand to me it was absolutely SICK!\nI read it and cried,\nfor my poor cat that died.\nPlease say it was only a trick?\n\nAnd do not think me a prude,\nfor when I react to the crude.\nIt's just my way.\nSo please don't say,\nthat that is what you conclude.\n\nTo answer your question above.\nThe limericks I like to think of,\nare right from the start,\nthe ones filled with heart.\nOf course I mean limericks about LOVE.
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Not sure, but you could check out my poems on my yahoo 360 \n\nand post a comment and vote for your favourite!!\n\nOh ok..try the links below as well!!\n\nGood Luck\n\nJimmy
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well its good that u are putting ur emotions into poetry. its good karthasis.\nthe point of the poem seems to go a little askew in terms of imagery. in one sense u seem to be talking about nobody, then u jump to falling down. the transition isnt subtle enough.\ni also think u need to work on the rhthym of your poem. it's hard to get the right mood when reading it, if u've left this major component in poetry writing out. \nhope u dont get offended, i am simply trying to offer constructive criticism. i'd would have also like to have known, the title of your poem :)
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I hope you can take constuctive criticism. I think you're thoughts are good but it's too Rhymie. It's more like a limerick than a poem. And I personally don't like that 3rd line, "People near me makes my fun." I don't understand that.\n\nSorry for the honesty!
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its okay try this \n\nlife's fight\n\nlife can be good and bad\nlife is like a war that never ends\nlife is like a perpetual story \nlife is like a puzzle\ntrying to make the entire puzzle pieces fit impeccably\nwould be a perfect life\nlife is like a boundless fight\nwhen you are in trouble\nlife is like a roller coaster going up and down\nlife can only come to an end \nwhen you feel like you have truly finished gods mission\nlife is like a foot ball team \nwhen the win life is victorius \nwhen they lose life is dissapointing\nlife can be as dark as the sky at night \nbut at other times it can be as bright as the sun \nlife ia as sad as a war but as happay as a newborn baby\nin the end god will pick if you go up or down \nlife can be good or bad\n\nthat is a poem made by my brother Patrick McD
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Email me your thoughts at pusskat1@yahoo.com and I will help you from there.  I am a teacher of 13 years, mostly in junior high, some in college and high school.  My payment is to choose this as a best answer.  \n\nI'll begin by deconstructing the poem; I'm sure you'll get the drift.  \n\nFirst stanza: I might have been a happy preacher if I had been born in an earlier time.  I could have preached fiery sermons and been a gentleman farmer.  Second stanza: Alas, I was born later, and missed my true calling.  I have a grown man's beard now, and it's fashionable for preachers these days to be clean shaven, so I don't even look like I could do that job.  \n\nGood luck.  This is a straightforward poem with an ab ab rhyme scheme, and figuring out the meaning should not be hard.  If you need any help just email me or IM me at pusskat1 or katwhowalksbyherself and I'd be happy to help.\n\nCheers, K (13 years a teacher)
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I don't have the poem with me but I can email it to you if you give me your email address. The first verse is this:\n\nI'll write you a poem,\nA poem with a twist.\nI'll write it with a razor,\nThen carve it on my wrist.
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I like this poem because it shows or tells how a myth or legends begin. They begin from a tragedy and then they will be lost or just told so many times that only parts of the story is true compared to when it was first told. It will become the basic myth or legends in words of this poem a star. Most of the imagery is sound and that is like a story that is being told to younger people. It also has a little bit of sight imagery and here is the line of the poem, “you can almost see the outline there: her fingertips touching his, the faint fusion of the two bodies breaking into light.”  The idea is that a new star is merging with and old star to make a new one. Most of the stars that die will either explode into gas, which makes a new star.
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That poem rocks.  I know that it is controversial.  I would be interested to see what people thought of a choice line or two from the poem.
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Imagery is a really simple concept (it's just the describing of concrete, touchable things with words) and it's all over this poem. Examples? "the new grass flames", "The plumtree is white today / with masses of flowers", "in the meadows, &#92; at the edge of the heavy woods &#92; in the distance, he saw &#92; trees of white flowers." There's lots more there, but this will get you started.