what do you think of this poem?
597502
sounds like some preacher crap
711368
the sad thing about this poem is that, EVERY SINGLE WORD IS TRUE, we have been used and abused to the point of even the most placid of people now becoming anti asylum and anti immigration, or racist as some would say.\nit is time all this came to a stop, enough is enough, we are now so overcrowded that there is no longer enough resources to go round,ie, jobs, houses, schools,NHS etc, if this carries on the way it is now we will soon become a third world country ourselves, and all that we have worked for and paid into will have all been for nothing.
660516
A real eye opener that chills you right to the bone. A harsh reminder why those sickos need to be stopped.\nIF this poem is regarding your own life then please seek help. Don't be afraid to tell someone, a teacher, a doctor, even a trusted aunt or other relative. They WILL take you seriously and something WILL be done. Telling someone and making it stop is surely better than continuing life as you are now.
802222
Honestly?  I think the poem is too gushy.  If you'd been dating for a while, it'd be great -- but from an anonymous person, the parts about "you're irreplaceable to me" and "my heart will never stop beating  . . ."  are a little creepy.\nI would change it to:\n\nWhen I think of the perfect girl,\nYou come instantly to mind\n\nWith the intellect of a genius,\nEyes that sparkle like gems,\nHair as soft as silk,\nAn angelic voice that sings beautiful melodies to my ears,\nCheeks as adorable and round,\nAnd a smile that lights up even the darkest room\nIt's obvious you are God's work of art\n\nYou're an amazing girl, an amazing person\nSo special to me\nAnd my heart beats gladly\nFor it lives off these feelings I have for you\n\nGood luck!
134236
That poem rocks.  I know that it is controversial.  I would be interested to see what people thought of a choice line or two from the poem.
129860
The poem is talking about the futility and uselessness of war.  The bitter irony is that comrades and the enemy are for the most part ordinary people, not that different from each other.  If he met one of each on the street, he could not tell which is which.  The soldier chose to fight, no one forced him to, and in his last moments he is questioning the sense of that decision.   He realizes that in the end this fighting and sacrifice is not going to change much for the ordinary person, so in many ways it is a waste, a waste of life.  He can't turn back the clock, and his destiny awaits him in "the clouds", heaven, the afterlife.\n\nI hope this helps.
522025
An interesting and sometimes-lovely poem. It's an acknowledgment of where and how the writer connects to his origins.\nPoetry doesn't need to make sense.  Like religion, it is often irrational.
844874
ok summer here is the best i got:\n\nThis poem is (obviously) a lament, or some sorrow for something lost, also known as an elegy.  In this case, the poem is a woman's song.  She is lamenting the loss of her lover (it is possible that he is simply not there, or absent).  \nHowever, it appears as if "her lord" is the same lord that governs the people in this poem.  Therefore, for some reason they are isolating her from him.  Her lord himself tells her to take up a "dwelling" that he has apparently appointed for her.  \nOnce there, she meets a man and falls in love with him, claiming that "death alone" would separate them.\nFor the remainder of the poem, the woman is expressing her deep grief as she is in exile in what seems to be some type of cave or tunnell in the ground.\n\nhere is a paragraph by paragraph analysis:\n1.  \nHere she is introducing her lament as a sorrowful tale of her utmost woe; that never before has she experienced any distress as dire or excruciating as this.\n\n2.\nhere she explains that her lords family/ gentry sent him on a sea journey.  "Dawn-cares" can be interpreted as she either worries about him so much, she is losing sleep, or she wakes up in the morning, and her 1st thought is her husband.  [These compound words are famous in anglo-saxon poetry.]  She decides to go into exile, which was a custom of women to do who were w/o there husbands.  She may have disgraced him and is thencforth banishing herself.  It seems that she is turning to his people for advice, and they have their own plans as to where she should go.  The scheme and plot to send her away and put her in a position which will forever keep them apart. \n\n3.\nHer lord confirms the dwelling place she is to go to.  Where she went for exile, she knows few people.\n\n4.  \nShe falls in love with a man who is depressive and well taken care of.  He also seems to be in exile w/ a broken heart...he may even be suicidal.  They vow together, that, in their exile, they will have eachother.  But, he kills himself, destroying their pact.  she is back to where she stared in her sorrow.\n\n5.  \nFillied with longing, she is sent to live in a cave or some sort of underground hovel.  \n\n6. She describes her surroundings as dismal and "briar-choked".  She bemoans that fact that loves walk the earth and experience joy, while she is condemned to despair.  She explains that she can never gain composure because she used to be so full of hope, promise, and she was enthused for life.  Now that everything is taken from her, she is torn.  She takes a turn to curse her lord and wish upon him sorrow and grief, that he may become lost and wandering in his journeys.  She wished upon him a brooding heart and "breast cares" (broken heart). \n\nWell, I really hope this helps you!! Good luck with everything!  I will also email this to u so u get it.
534436
Good Poem.......lots of potential! Keep it up!! Good Luck on the girlfriend too.....she's out there!!
722502
It seems to be well written, I like it, except maybe you could add a stronger conclusion to the poem. :)
714422
that poem was so sweet im crying now\n\nu would be a great poet u have got a good talent :) xx
975149
can you give more information on this poem? It looks like a medieval piece of art and totally strange, even to me holding an English literature degree.. Details, the writer, title etc. please?
935796
It's ok, but just not my style of poetry.\nIt needs to have a rhythm.\n\nIt might work better using the japanese haiku style.\n\nOk, I did just a slight altering. See if this works better.\n\nI really like sports football is my thang,\nAnd Peyton Manning is the man of the game. \n\nI love the colts  and you might be surprised, \nthat any girl on the planet likes to watch sweaty guys\n\nI really like football and someday I'll be\na pro football player on a pro football team.
700844
Very nice...you little romantic.......a poem or a song?\n\nYou wrote this....I love it!!!!!
635006
Sort of an explanation....\n\nIt's rather fatalistic, don't you think? For me, the poem is a very serious treatment on the mortality of being human.\n\n"...still like muffled drums are beating funeral marches to the grave".\n\nI memorized that poem 30 years ago and think of it once in a while. Fun to recite as Longfellow has such a simple cadence to his work.
1049444
its a beautiful poem\n10/10\nyou have a talent my darling\npursue it!\n\n\nStay Hungry, Stay Foolish
591756
Email me your thoughts at pusskat1@yahoo.com and I will help you from there.  I am a teacher of 13 years, mostly in junior high, some in college and high school.  My payment is to choose this as a best answer.  \n\nI'll begin by deconstructing the poem; I'm sure you'll get the drift.  \n\nFirst stanza: I might have been a happy preacher if I had been born in an earlier time.  I could have preached fiery sermons and been a gentleman farmer.  Second stanza: Alas, I was born later, and missed my true calling.  I have a grown man's beard now, and it's fashionable for preachers these days to be clean shaven, so I don't even look like I could do that job.  \n\nGood luck.  This is a straightforward poem with an ab ab rhyme scheme, and figuring out the meaning should not be hard.  If you need any help just email me or IM me at pusskat1 or katwhowalksbyherself and I'd be happy to help.\n\nCheers, K (13 years a teacher)