is this a good  introduction paragraph?
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Not a bad start but learn how to use SPELLCHECK!
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Your first paragraph should grab the reader's attention.  It should be interested and contain information about the subject to follow.  This is referred to as a "thesis."\nThis info is more for essays.\n\n"Motifs" are a great idea too.  Okay, for example, last night I was watching the Patriot, the introduction to the movie was Mel Gibson thinking about how his sin's would come back to haunt him.  After his son dies he makes reference to this again.  It has a very powerful effect.  Take note that motif's are used in literary works too.\nI would say that this is for a book.
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I'm glad you asked. 1) While you read - you should be maintaining an outline of the facts on each chapter. 2) Make note of characters, characterization (little tidbits the author reveals, and the ones you find as you read) 3) Construct a story map and note how the story moves from the exposition-to the rising action-climax-falling action and then resolution. 4) Note what your thoughts are about each character, and how they relate.  After your review your outline, go back and read it. Now you should be able to draw an intro statement based on a number of things you have discovered about the storyline, characters, plot, theme, etc.  One or two items should stick out.  For example- if the protagonist (main character) is driving the story, then trace how he/she does that and how they effect the outcome.  A good summary to me is the student who evaluates many sides of the story from different perspectives. Make it brief, you don't want to reveal "all of the good stuff", but as the reader and writer - your outline should have more information so that if you need to return and do more essay writing, you have the facts with you. Good luck to you.  I love questions like these.  It challenges me as an English teacher.  You are welcome to email me directly if you have any further questions.
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It should be fine.\n\nQuestions?  Concerns?  Comments?  Email me through the link in my profile, and I'll get back to you as soon as possible.
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you should have an opening paragraph, at least 3 body paragraphs and a closing.  All paragraphs should have an opening sentence  with at least 3  body sentences then a closing sentence.  Your first and last paragraphs should be summaries of the article stating the same thing worded differently.
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After "cultures"  put a period or sentence is too long. Then , you could say, ' These differences include their..."  I would prefer that you use the word "about" rather than "on" when you name each ot the differences.Actually not a bad paragraph.  Now if you can discuss each of these ideas you introduced in the first paragraph in the body of your paper, you will do well!  Looks well-thought out.  Just read the other answers.  No, don't include more details in THIS paragraph.  It is just the introduction.  Details should follow.    I am a Christian and, yes, we believe that Jesus is deity.
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It depends on what class this is for.  It is always best to write about something that interests you or something that you would like to learn more about.  There are a million possible topics to choose from!
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It is usually found int the intro paragraph.
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uum I'm not sure but I think a thesis is what your entire essay is going to be about and belongs in the intro paragraph...Ive never heard of focus statement but its probably supposed to be what you are going to talk about specifically in a paragraph...like your main idea.
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How about a closing paragraph/sentence about how beneficial it would be to incorporate all those strategies into university life and the difference it could make to overall success?\n\nI hope this helps.
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Intro with main idea of topic\n2-3 supporting detail paragraphs\n1 short conclustion
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Sounds like an essay.\n\nDo your own homework.
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The intro of a paper basically summarizes what you're going to say in the body of the paper.  As a professor of mine once said, "Tell them what you're going to tell them (intro), tell them (body), then tell them what you told them (conclusion)".  Obviosly the "them" are the readers of your paper.
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Why don't you change your thesis to something simpler, like "Summer is definitely my favorite season." In the first part of the introduction, list and elaborate on all the things you listed above, like relaxation and friends. In this way, your introduction will do what it should: draw people in with the general and then lead them to the specific.
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ok so ur first paragraph should be like an overview for your points. usually you should have five paragraphs: 1 intro, 3 body paragraphs, and 1 conclusion. look at the dbq question and try to use all or almost all documents. then use the documents as support for ur 3 arguments. the intro paragraph should include: the specific place the dbq is talking abt (ie: germany), around what time the events occured, and ur 3 points that u will discuss. ur intro paragraph only hasta be around 1-4 sentences and just set up the pts u will talk abt in ur 3 paragraphs. after that, its smooth sailing, jsut follow ur points.
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I think your site looks great.  Just a heads up, though, on the first page you mis-spelled intro (you spelled it entro).  First impressions are key so you may want to check for other spelling and/or grammar errors.  Very nice site, though!  I can tell you've put a lot of work into it!
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It looks great. It all rhymes and it flows very well. You  have done a nice job. The last paragraph -- move "and" to the second line to that beam and team rhyme. Your spelling and grammar are perfect.