wat do u think of this poem?
483264
You are a very talented writer, you gave me butterfly's and I'm a girl..and STRAIT! If that guy doesn't fall in love with you over that poem than there's something wrong with him! Beautiful!
547373
Good use of symbols. I like how line 2 fits with the last two lines, it brings unity to the poem. Towards the end I think I got a little bit of a glimpse of what the poem might be about, but ultimately I feel like the message is hidden from me. It seems the third- and fourth-to-last lines are the culmination of the poem; is it possible to reword some of the earlier lines so as the reader can share what you're feeling when they reach the end?\n\nRegarding parenthesis: as long as you know what they mean then they're fine.
1167570
you are talented. Every one shows his/her feelings in a way, and one of the most beautiful ways to speak our mind is writing a poem.  :)
63659
well its good that u are putting ur emotions into poetry. its good karthasis.\nthe point of the poem seems to go a little askew in terms of imagery. in one sense u seem to be talking about nobody, then u jump to falling down. the transition isnt subtle enough.\ni also think u need to work on the rhthym of your poem. it's hard to get the right mood when reading it, if u've left this major component in poetry writing out. \nhope u dont get offended, i am simply trying to offer constructive criticism. i'd would have also like to have known, the title of your poem :)
90346
I haven't studied this poem, but I don't see it as a love poem from a man to a woman.  It seems to me more like he is taken with awe at the touch of a baby.  At the same time, "somewhere i have never travelled..." seems to suggest death.  \n\nMaybe it is my mood, but I can find in this an understanding of how close to death we walk as living beings.  Almost flirting with death.  The rose opens.  The rose closes.\n\n"or if your wish be to close me, i and\nmy life will shut very beautifully ,suddenly,\nas when the heart of this flower imagines\nthe snow carefully everywhere descending;"\n\nIt doesn't feel like a love poem, although it might be.  If your teacher is asking you to view it as such, then you should completely ignore this answer.  He/she knows MUCH more about it than I do.  If you are asked to look at the poem and gather your own opinion, I would suggest looking at the poem as a metaphor about the fragility of life.
1021910
Wow..that is a great poem..Did you write that?  Well I am in love with someone but unfortunately he doesn't love me back..so it is hard but I am getting over the pain..But when I do find love I will let you know how I feel..
259481
Wow, very beautiful and powerful.  I particularly love the first 3 lines as well as the lines about sending peace and love, but little hate or envy.  \n\nKeep on writing!  :)
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www.netpoets.com/poems/friends
418336
in my personal opinion its a good poem but i find poems are always better when the person has experienced what they are writing about whether or not its racism, abuse or love and you obviously have some skills as a poet but i think you could reach your full potential if you write about something you have been through
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Dear Legggsss2002,\nThere is no one on this earth more qualified to answer that question than YOU....By his every action,comment and gesture he answers that question every day....all I can say is open your eyes and open your mind and the answer to that question will come to you. I sincerely hope you like what you find.\nAlso, thank you for your encouraging remarks about my poem,"Once".
980984
nice poem is it a haiku
401359
Your poem gives me a smile. If your poems are as good as this one, i think you should publish more poems. I have heard that Xlibris will publish some quality poems. try to look into their website... in case you are interested.
466331
These are the words to the poem.\npleasure turns to the pain \nlessons learned from the strain \nquestions burned in my brain.. \nabout whether love is humane \nin its touch. \nthese thoughts are like salmon swimming upstream \nin the tears of your deceit. \nfighting the current hurt that kills more than is created by the chaos \nof our intertwined emotions. \nchaotic because the anchor of Erros' arrow has been plucked \nfrom the vessel of my undying infatuation \nseparation not as simple as the distance between us \nmy mind no longer possessed by demons \nthat have been the overseers of my enslavement to your lies \nthe seeds of these lies rooted so deeply \nthey have cracked the foundation of what we once shared \nallowing the faith in us i had sealed inside \nto gush out like a river \nripping the image of our future together from my thoughts \nas violently and as brutally as if it were a child \nbeing taken from its mothers arms \nim left surrounded in darkness \nbut i refuse to be swallowed by it \nmy lonliness like the night air \ninvisible to the eye \nobvious to the touch \nit is cold uncomfortableness \nyet if i could do it all over again \nid do it in the same skin im in \nto lay down and let love die \njust stay down and let love lie? \nno, no..not i \nid stay around and let love fly \neven though i have seen its darkest form \ndeceit \nnothing else could taste this warm \nor feel this sweet...
599343
AWWW! I LOVE IT! i love poetry that is written from the heart and that poem was! great job!!!! why aren't there more men like you out there! you're gonna make some girl very happy! :)
785373
I see this poem as a heart felt poem with a lot of deep sorrow, If this is your life experience I am very sorry that this has happened to you.\nLoosing a child can be very painful, which I'm sure it would be for you if this is what happened, for you but I would also like to say to you that the true and Almighty God is aware of and feeling your pain in compassion and that is also the reason for his promise, many people who have gone or are going through a similar experience, and asking why?This promise I just spoke of is found in Revelation Ch21:verse4)and it is a very heartwarming one where God promises to wipe away every tear from mankind's eyes, and that he will actually swallow up death, mourning and sorrow,and pain will be no more.The dead will be resurrected to life again becoming conscious again, is this not a wonder full promise from a very loving God, who cares very deeply for us, and our pains even past experiences will have gone from our minds, and the ones that caused those pains will be punished, so any who have perpetrated pain to others, will be dealt with justly
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it is actually pretty good. i like it. don't give up you should keep writing poems, i read it and i can almost feel what you felt when you wrote the poem. Good job.\n\ni write lyrics and i wish i could make them somehow a lil darker then they come out to be and you showed me that it is possible that i just need to work on it more,  your poem is great.
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Being a poet myself, I have to say it's a good poem, but what it's saying is you are not really dealing with the pain and hurt too well. My heart goes out to you. I hurt for you, and also, identify with you. I'm compiling a book of my poems, called "Pain On Paper". The poetry for us is a release of our pain...........keep on writing! You're doing good! Talk to somebody though, a friend, a counselor.......\nSOMEBODY! Get the pain out!!