Please tell me, how do you like this poem?
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Although grammatically incorrect and lacking steady timbre, there is no doubt as to the feeling and emotion expressed in your poem. I don't know about your friend but if he or she read it I am sure that they would continue to be a friend for life. Good luck.
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Excellent, the 'feeling' is there, clear and precise. That is my honest view. However, never worry what others think. Write it for yourself and someone dear to you.  Poetry is, and should be personal.  I do not wish to distract from yours, by I wrote 'Dreams' a long time ago. Just for you and not for comment:\n\nDreams.\n\nOh, dreams of youth, now gone with time,\nThe heights you said you once would climb,\nYou kept your feet set in the clay,\nNow all those hopes seem far away.\n\nYou’d be the boss within five years,\nYou kept your mouth shut, you were all ears,\nYou never noticed what was being said,\nYou sadly never turned your head.\n\nYou trusted those you should not trust,\nYou praised those, you should have cursed,\nYour thoughts and plans, you freely gave,\nYou should have stood back, and not been brave.\n\nBut where are they now, while you’re still here,\nSad and broken, they’re full of fear,\nAfraid of what will come and why,\nAfraid of what happens when they die.\n\nWhile you are happy and content,\nMortgage paid, you pay no rent,\nFinances secure, children grown,\nNothing borrowed, all your own.\n\nWhile they all worry day by day,\nYour out whenever, your golf to play,\nSo don’t be sorry, what’s done is done,\nConsider yourself, the luckiest one.\n\nFor you can hold your head up high,\nAnd when it comes for you to die,\nYou’ll stand before the Man above,\nJust tell Him, that you lived and loved.
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This poem is really a good poem... Yes it is a good peom... The meaning is not deep but when you want a deeper meeanig then put the words into your life then you will understand the real meaning of the peom\n\nDesiderata \n\nGo placidly amid the noise and haste,\nand remember what peace there may be in silence.\nAs far as possible without surrender\nbe on good terms with all persons.\nSpeak your truth quietly and clearly;\nand listen to others,\neven the dull and the ignorant;\nthey too have their story. \n\nAvoid loud and aggressive persons,\nthey are vexations to the spirit.\nIf you compare yourself with others,\nyou may become vain and bitter;\nfor always there will be greater and lesser persons than yourself.\nEnjoy your achievements as well as your plans. \n\n\nKeep interested in your own career, however humble;\nit is a real possession in the changing fortunes of time.\nExercise caution in your business affairs;\nfor the world is full of trickery.\nBut let this not blind you to what virtue there is;\nmany persons strive for high ideals;\nand everywhere life is full of heroism. \n\n\nBe yourself.\nEspecially, do not feign affection.\nNeither be cynical about love;\nfor in the face of all aridity and disenchantment\nit is as perennial as the grass. \n\n\nTake kindly the counsel of the years,\ngracefully surrendering the things of youth.\nNurture strength of spirit to shield you in sudden misfortune.\nBut do not distress yourself with dark imaginings.\nMany fears are born of fatigue and loneliness.\nBeyond a wholesome discipline,\nbe gentle with yourself. \n\n\nYou are a child of the universe,\nno less than the trees and the stars;\nyou have a right to be here.\nAnd whether or not it is clear to you,\nno doubt the universe is unfolding as it should. \n\n\nTherefore be at peace with God,\nwhatever you conceive Him to be,\nand whatever your labors and aspirations,\nin the noisy confusion of life keep peace with your soul. \n\n\nWith all its sham, drudgery, and broken dreams,\nit is still a beautiful world.\nBe cheerful.\nStrive to be happy. \n\n\nMax Ehrmann, Desiderata, Copyright 1952
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Nice poem!!!! can I quote?
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can you give more information on this poem? It looks like a medieval piece of art and totally strange, even to me holding an English literature degree.. Details, the writer, title etc. please?
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the mood is one of satisfaction. the writer is saying that when you have a fence dividing you, it does not "divide" but it prevents.the tone, i guess would be the same. Why exactly are you reading this poem? i had to for a school project.
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Awesome poem!\nAmazing!! lol...\nu were 10 or 11? that's so amazing!
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Good use of symbols. I like how line 2 fits with the last two lines, it brings unity to the poem. Towards the end I think I got a little bit of a glimpse of what the poem might be about, but ultimately I feel like the message is hidden from me. It seems the third- and fourth-to-last lines are the culmination of the poem; is it possible to reword some of the earlier lines so as the reader can share what you're feeling when they reach the end?\n\nRegarding parenthesis: as long as you know what they mean then they're fine.
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it is an excellent poem.I like it .good job.well-done
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Hello, Kaleb,\n\nI was and am an English teacher. \n\nYou can start with the poem's theme. If it is about love or nature or whatever, what does it say? How does it make you feel? Does the author choose words that are happy or depressing (mood)?\n\nYou can talk about word choices, length and, if you know something of the author, you can take that approach. \n\nHere's an example:\n\nMy Beard (Shel Silverstein)\n\nMy beard grows to my toes\nI never wears no clothes\nI wraps my beard around my bare\nand down the road I goes.\n\nWhat is Silverstein doing here? He gives you an image (a naked man with a long beard) and creates humor. His words are simple as if the man is not educated. The poem is short, cute and simple--ideal for kids or those of us who love to laugh! Silverstein wrote songs, poems and all kinds of things and was a very private man. Maybe the "beard" of the speaker is Silverstein seeking privacy.\n\nThis is a short example. I wish you luck.\n\nFor further assistance, you can try owlenglish@purdue.edu. Not sure if the url is right, but I hope you get your paper done.\n\nGambatte (good luck)from Japan!
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the poem or the phrase?  Please explain in more detail.
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Wow, I just got done reading that poem. He is a great poet. \n\nThis is what I think he is saying in his poem. He talks about his "thirtieth year to heaven" his birthday, and the child. Turning 30 is kinda traumatic. He woke up to a beautiful day, decided to take a walk, soaking in nature and his home, everything that is familiar to him. It reminded him of a birthday in his childhood. Beautiful... then suddenly changing to gray fog and rain. He is and never will be that child again though that child is still alive inside him, knowing that he was happy then, missing that time of his life, knowing that time is always shoving you forward always closer and closer to death. But then at the end he can remember that he is lucky to be alive, though the sadness is still tainting him.\n\nThat's just my idea.
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I love the poem.. made me kinda teary-eyed.\nThen when I read that you had not met the woman that you wrote it about till recently.. it made me sadder yet.\n\nShe will be sad reading it, knowing she just met you.\n\nMaybe she will be happy knowing you love her enough now to write it.\nWell written poem... very kid of you to write it for your mom.\n\nI am wondering if you remember staring at her... if you just met her.\n\nNice poem though.
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Wow, very beautiful and powerful.  I particularly love the first 3 lines as well as the lines about sending peace and love, but little hate or envy.  \n\nKeep on writing!  :)
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here you'll find analysis of this poem\n\nhttp://oldpoetry.com/ocomment/by/AndrewHide\n\nhttp://oldpoetry.com/opoem/\n\nhttp://palc.sd40.bc.ca/palc/classes/assignments.htm
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my favorite poem...\n\ni carry your heart with me(i carry it in\nmy heart)i am never without it(anywhere\ni go you go,my dear; and whatever is done\nby only me is your doing,my darling)\ni fear\nno fate(for you are my fate,my sweet)i want\nno world(for beautiful you are my world,my true)\nand it's you are whatever a moon has always meant\nand whatever a sun will always sing is you\n\nhere is the deepest secret nobody knows\n(here is the root of the root and the bud of the bud\nand the sky of the sky of a tree called life;which grows\nhigher than the soul can hope or mind can hide)\nand this is the wonder that's keeping the stars apart\n\ni carry your heart(i carry it in my heart) \n\n~ee cummings\n\nanother one that is quite good...though not really about love...\n\ni like my body when it is with your\nbody. It is so quite new a thing.\nMuscles better and nerves more.\ni like your body. i like what it does,\ni like its hows. i like to feel the spine\nof your body and its bones, and the trembling\n-firm-smooth ness and which i will\nagain and again and again\nkiss, i like kissing this and that of you,\ni like, slowly stroking the, shocking fuzz\nof your electric fur, and what-is-it comes\nover parting flesh ... And eyes big love-crumbs,\n\nand possibly i like the thrill\n\nof under me you so quite new \n\n~ee cummings
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One of the main ways the poem speaks' (the Diction?) is through the rhythm. It is slow and unhurried like the footsteps of the people carrying Sir John and like the drum beat at a funeral.  Otherwise there isn't a lot of imagery.  There is the 'struggling moonlight' perhaps an image of their own struggle in Battle.  The words are all short and clear, like a soldiers, and like his own funeral with no pomp though he was a hero.