Here is my poem is it good? I just thought of it just now?
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Thats a poem?whatever happened to "roses are red..."?
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What do *you* think?  \n\nLiterary criticism is worth nothing until you learn to form your own opinions of creative works.  I can tell you what *I* think but how are you going to know if I'm right unless you try and sort it out for yourself?\n\nUpdate: Actually I don't think much of this poem. It's far too literal and falls into plain diatribe by the end.  But anyway, update your question with your own opinions and I'll tell you if I think you're on the right track.\n\nUpdate: NO!  You're off to a great start!  Excellent thinking!  \n\nConsider the rock, the river, and the tree are obviously not supposed to be literally a rock, river, and tree, but metaphors. What do they stand for?  What are the characteristics of each?  What are the differences between them?  What is the promise of each?\n\nHint:  The rock never changes but provides a solid base.  The river flows and provides life-giving water.  The tree grows and always changes and gives comfort and shade.  What three things are also related like this?  One never changing below us, one always flowing by us, and the last always growing above us?\n\nOnce you see these the rest of the poem makes a lot more sense.\n\nAs for "tone", look for repetitive sounds in the poem.  What words rhyme?  What words repeat?  What vowel sounds are repeated?  Repetition and rhyme are used to emphasize certain words -- do you see any patterns?\n\nFinally most scholars interpret this poem to be a celebration of diversity and united effort, not necessarily about everyone having a second chance.  But I suppose that's a possibly sub-theme of the poem.\n\nUpdate: if you want more help please post in my 360 page.  This forum doesn't work well for repeated postings.
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It's Nice\n\nVisit me http://www.geocities.com/moonson2006/
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you can go on netpoets.com they have some good poems on there and I have a couple on there also
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It is Nice and you have good ideas how ever work on your grammar and it is kinda choppy when reading a style that can be vary effective if used correctly how ever not vary fitting for a love poem. Keep up the hard work.
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Now think about it! What do you think?
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(m)\n\nNice Poem..... what happened next......
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in my personal opinion its a good poem but i find poems are always better when the person has experienced what they are writing about whether or not its racism, abuse or love and you obviously have some skills as a poet but i think you could reach your full potential if you write about something you have been through
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You luuuuuv poetry thats for sure, to think of so much stuff is great. I like it however I find myself confused about the meaning. Are you making fun of passion or beeing coy? I think you are holding back! Don't be shy, there is alot of "passion" in your poetry. Don't hold back!
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Your poem gives me a smile. If your poems are as good as this one, i think you should publish more poems. I have heard that Xlibris will publish some quality poems. try to look into their website... in case you are interested.
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That was amazing. If you wrote this you have an immense amount of talent. You seem to know what you want to say and have a perfect way of putting in on a piece of paper. You should go to www.howtowritepoetry.com and enter it in their contest. I think that was a beautiful poem and you should continue writing because you have pure natural talent that i think people can relate to and are touched by because i know i was.
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Not sure!\nBut the idea....has me thinking....and is a very good one!
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thats really good....u should get this published.....if its not already
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Hey, I am so sorry that I didnt write a poem. I cant write poems very good. LOL. But I just wanted to tell you how good that poem is.I love reading poems about what others went through, and this is the best one yet! I hope everything works out between you and your ex.
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that poem was so sweet im crying now\n\nu would be a great poet u have got a good talent :) xx
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AWWW! I LOVE IT! i love poetry that is written from the heart and that poem was! great job!!!! why aren't there more men like you out there! you're gonna make some girl very happy! :)
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i have, just now from you. are thay any good?