What do you think of my poem seriously?
411144
I like it. It really shows the problems in today's world.
924467
Excellent poem. I printed it & hung it in my Living room wall.\n Thanks
134236
That poem rocks.  I know that it is controversial.  I would be interested to see what people thought of a choice line or two from the poem.
522025
An interesting and sometimes-lovely poem. It's an acknowledgment of where and how the writer connects to his origins.\nPoetry doesn't need to make sense.  Like religion, it is often irrational.
334020
I love it, I write poetry myself, you should keep going with it :) It is very deep , Good job
886362
That is beautiful. It's heartfelt and I used to write a lot and in High school I was picked best writer by the teachers. This poem seems as though you or whoever wrote this wasn't writing because they felt they had to but because these are feelings that plague them everyday. I feel that the only way to be a true writer is to be able to contact the feelings inside of you and bring them out in pictures instead of words and put those pictures into words on paper. It seems that's what the writer was doing and did a very good job at interpreting her own thoughts and pictures. That's what I do, I'm an only child so all I had was my own thoughts and imagination. Keep writing so you can get better and more refined and you could compile a book of poetry and get it published and make some good money off of it. Sorry that was my entrepreneurial side coming out of me. Good work though!!!! Practice makes perfect, you can be an excellent writer once you keep practicing and find your own style. Excellent hope to see more!
231805
the poem is very good!!!
713057
the poem is really touching..i loved it,,i know u are gonna give it to ur best friend who is upset with u for some resons..am i right??all the best,i know u'll definately get the problem solved and ur best friend will come back to u if she really understands ur feelings.
828409
Hi there!\n\nSorry...I couldn't cut and paste the lyrics....there are some pretty bad words in it...I think you knew that...hahaha.  Hope this helps.  Here are some l inks anyhow...\n\n:-)
444360
i can say to u thatz my best Poem...\nand the count.. of it is:\n\nBeware the fantasy that speaks,\nThe vague ideal that springs a soul.\nNo marriage can avoid the shoal\nThat lies beneath such sun-drenched peaks.\nNo love but may retreat to stone\nAs sirens sad the heart entice.\nTwo names entwine in paradise\nWhile here two lovers lie alone.
746531
Wow, that is so beautiful.\nNo, it does not sound like a letter, it's definately a poem and it has a story somewhere in there. I wouldn't mind hearing it, i'm interested. I've written a few poems but they're not constructed well like yours is very well done. mine all have stories burried somewhere in them. How i came to writting whatever i wrote or what they're about.\n\nbest of luck, and keep on rolling\n~just a Youngling\n\nps. i chocked on a paperclip because that's how i roll
666947
haha written just for you and thanks for another 2 pts. \n\ni wanted to write a poem to show you that i'm sorry\nbut my poor englsh is worst then dreaded cancers,\nso in order to appologise for my mistakes\nall i could do was ask yahoo answers,\nsome stranger wrote this poem for you\nbecuase i think as bad as i write,\ni just hope you will forgive me\ncause i do not want to fight.\n\n\ntada there you go :-)
503338
Good one :]\n\nBut one exception to your poem:\n\nI can't FORGET your funny poem.(My forgetter would become a little worse) :]\n\nHave a nice day :]
381484
I was looking forever for bicurious thanks for the joke.\n\nEye on the T.V. 'cause tragedy thrills me.\nWhatever flavor it happens to be like..\n"Killed by the husband",\n"Drowned by the ocean",\n"Shot by his own son",\n"She used the poison in his tea\nand kissed him goodbye".\nThat's my kinda story.\nIt's no fun until someone dies.\n\nDon't look at me like I am a monster.\nFrown out your one face,\nBut with the other.\nStare like a junkie into the T.V..\nStare like a zombie,\nWhile the mother holds her child.\nWatches him die.\nPleads to the sky crying:\n"Why, oh why?"\n\nCause I need to watch things die... from a distance.\nVicariously I live while the whole world dies.\nYou all need it too - don't lie.\n\nWhy can't we just admit it?\nWhy can't we just admit?\n\nWe won't give pause until the blood is flowing.\nNeither the brave nor bold, or writers of stories told.\nWe won't give pause until the blood is flowing.\n\nI need to watch things die.. from a good safe distance.\nVicariously I live while the whole world dies.\nYou all feel the same so..\n\nWhy can't we just admit it?\n\nBlood like rain come down.\nDrown on grave and ground.\n\nPart vampire.\nPart warrior.\nCarnivore and voyeur.\nStare at the transmitter.\nSing to the death rattle.\n\nLie (4x)\n\n(Background news headline)\n\nCredulous, divest your desire to believe in\nAngels in the hearts of men.\nPull your head on out.\nYour head believes it give a listen.\nShouldn't have to say it all again.\nThe universe is hostile,\nSo impersonal.\nDevour to survive, so it is,\nSo it's always been.\n\nWe all feed on tragedy.\nIt's like blood to a vampire.\n\nVicariously, I live while the whole world dies.\nMuch better you than I.
788956
I loved this one...It's a very sweet poem about showing someone a reason not to take their own life .... Truly,Heart warming!!!! And I should know..I'm a  published Poet...It shows warmth and tenderness....It also lets me see inside your heart.And I see a warm,loving person..\n~hugs~
807283
It's interesting, as a poem I would have stopped at struggle to change as a song its fine to continue, Some grammatical and punctuation errors, I would accept it as a work in progress. :-) good luck and keep writing
935796
It's ok, but just not my style of poetry.\nIt needs to have a rhythm.\n\nIt might work better using the japanese haiku style.\n\nOk, I did just a slight altering. See if this works better.\n\nI really like sports football is my thang,\nAnd Peyton Manning is the man of the game. \n\nI love the colts  and you might be surprised, \nthat any girl on the planet likes to watch sweaty guys\n\nI really like football and someday I'll be\na pro football player on a pro football team.