What do you think of this poem?
372729
i LOVE it!!! what do u think of this poem?\n\nI've never felt this way before\nit's all brand new to me\nmy head is spinning, I cant breathe\nYou are all I see.\n\ni long for you to notice me\nI wish you'd ask me out\nso this is what first love is like,\nAnd what a crush is all about.
368946
Excellent, the 'feeling' is there, clear and precise. That is my honest view. However, never worry what others think. Write it for yourself and someone dear to you.  Poetry is, and should be personal.  I do not wish to distract from yours, by I wrote 'Dreams' a long time ago. Just for you and not for comment:\n\nDreams.\n\nOh, dreams of youth, now gone with time,\nThe heights you said you once would climb,\nYou kept your feet set in the clay,\nNow all those hopes seem far away.\n\nYou’d be the boss within five years,\nYou kept your mouth shut, you were all ears,\nYou never noticed what was being said,\nYou sadly never turned your head.\n\nYou trusted those you should not trust,\nYou praised those, you should have cursed,\nYour thoughts and plans, you freely gave,\nYou should have stood back, and not been brave.\n\nBut where are they now, while you’re still here,\nSad and broken, they’re full of fear,\nAfraid of what will come and why,\nAfraid of what happens when they die.\n\nWhile you are happy and content,\nMortgage paid, you pay no rent,\nFinances secure, children grown,\nNothing borrowed, all your own.\n\nWhile they all worry day by day,\nYour out whenever, your golf to play,\nSo don’t be sorry, what’s done is done,\nConsider yourself, the luckiest one.\n\nFor you can hold your head up high,\nAnd when it comes for you to die,\nYou’ll stand before the Man above,\nJust tell Him, that you lived and loved.
547373
Good use of symbols. I like how line 2 fits with the last two lines, it brings unity to the poem. Towards the end I think I got a little bit of a glimpse of what the poem might be about, but ultimately I feel like the message is hidden from me. It seems the third- and fourth-to-last lines are the culmination of the poem; is it possible to reword some of the earlier lines so as the reader can share what you're feeling when they reach the end?\n\nRegarding parenthesis: as long as you know what they mean then they're fine.
732708
Awesome poem! I like the way it flows, and how you put feeling into the poem. Kick-A**-Tic. Let me know if you write any more. ROCK ON!!
660516
A real eye opener that chills you right to the bone. A harsh reminder why those sickos need to be stopped.\nIF this poem is regarding your own life then please seek help. Don't be afraid to tell someone, a teacher, a doctor, even a trusted aunt or other relative. They WILL take you seriously and something WILL be done. Telling someone and making it stop is surely better than continuing life as you are now.
975149
can you give more information on this poem? It looks like a medieval piece of art and totally strange, even to me holding an English literature degree.. Details, the writer, title etc. please?
418336
in my personal opinion its a good poem but i find poems are always better when the person has experienced what they are writing about whether or not its racism, abuse or love and you obviously have some skills as a poet but i think you could reach your full potential if you write about something you have been through
415430
It is Nice and you have good ideas how ever work on your grammar and it is kinda choppy when reading a style that can be vary effective if used correctly how ever not vary fitting for a love poem. Keep up the hard work.
599343
AWWW! I LOVE IT! i love poetry that is written from the heart and that poem was! great job!!!! why aren't there more men like you out there! you're gonna make some girl very happy! :)
503338
Good one :]\n\nBut one exception to your poem:\n\nI can't FORGET your funny poem.(My forgetter would become a little worse) :]\n\nHave a nice day :]
1150421
I would have to know what this is from and who wrote it.  If it is the lyrics to some song, I would say don't let young children hear it.  If it is the poetry of someone older and more mature expressing pain of life, that's okay.  If this has been written by some teenager or young person who is suffering, I would worry.  Yes, it is beautiful and a true sign of amazing talent and use of imagery and words, but it could signify a cry for help.  Hope someone is listening.
129860
The poem is talking about the futility and uselessness of war.  The bitter irony is that comrades and the enemy are for the most part ordinary people, not that different from each other.  If he met one of each on the street, he could not tell which is which.  The soldier chose to fight, no one forced him to, and in his last moments he is questioning the sense of that decision.   He realizes that in the end this fighting and sacrifice is not going to change much for the ordinary person, so in many ways it is a waste, a waste of life.  He can't turn back the clock, and his destiny awaits him in "the clouds", heaven, the afterlife.\n\nI hope this helps.
668269
well, if u wrote it, CONGRAGULATIONS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!, if not i think this is just a ordinary poem, probably written to impress a lady or something. I have a friend who published poems, and this poem would be an B- or 7.5/10 grade, which would not make it to the poem industry. But as I said, this poem has a lot of rich text that is exceptionally enriching. It takes great skill to write that, and that is why we are not all writers.
747164
i think its acrostic poem..not sure though
891342
Awesome poem!\nAmazing!! lol...\nu were 10 or 11? that's so amazing!
725636
It would be interesting to also hear the melody.  I have a melody in my head for this.  Your lyrics are good. pretty good.\nThe song seems to be about a kind of bad boy that you are hooked on.
886362
That is beautiful. It's heartfelt and I used to write a lot and in High school I was picked best writer by the teachers. This poem seems as though you or whoever wrote this wasn't writing because they felt they had to but because these are feelings that plague them everyday. I feel that the only way to be a true writer is to be able to contact the feelings inside of you and bring them out in pictures instead of words and put those pictures into words on paper. It seems that's what the writer was doing and did a very good job at interpreting her own thoughts and pictures. That's what I do, I'm an only child so all I had was my own thoughts and imagination. Keep writing so you can get better and more refined and you could compile a book of poetry and get it published and make some good money off of it. Sorry that was my entrepreneurial side coming out of me. Good work though!!!! Practice makes perfect, you can be an excellent writer once you keep practicing and find your own style. Excellent hope to see more!