dO you think my poem is sweeeet??
117601
Nicely written, fix the spelling mistakes and you've got yourself a nice poem.  Give it to her yourself.  Girls like confidence.
807283
It's interesting, as a poem I would have stopped at struggle to change as a song its fine to continue, Some grammatical and punctuation errors, I would accept it as a work in progress. :-) good luck and keep writing
668269
well, if u wrote it, CONGRAGULATIONS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!, if not i think this is just a ordinary poem, probably written to impress a lady or something. I have a friend who published poems, and this poem would be an B- or 7.5/10 grade, which would not make it to the poem industry. But as I said, this poem has a lot of rich text that is exceptionally enriching. It takes great skill to write that, and that is why we are not all writers.
746531
Wow, that is so beautiful.\nNo, it does not sound like a letter, it's definately a poem and it has a story somewhere in there. I wouldn't mind hearing it, i'm interested. I've written a few poems but they're not constructed well like yours is very well done. mine all have stories burried somewhere in them. How i came to writting whatever i wrote or what they're about.\n\nbest of luck, and keep on rolling\n~just a Youngling\n\nps. i chocked on a paperclip because that's how i roll
153847
lol...that's so sweet...\ni dunno..mayb u can make one up based on any other poem,or just start from scratch?\ni just hope laura n corey culd live happily evr after!!gud luck!!
1101460
it is actually pretty good. i like it. don't give up you should keep writing poems, i read it and i can almost feel what you felt when you wrote the poem. Good job.\n\ni write lyrics and i wish i could make them somehow a lil darker then they come out to be and you showed me that it is possible that i just need to work on it more,  your poem is great.
891342
Awesome poem!\nAmazing!! lol...\nu were 10 or 11? that's so amazing!
599343
AWWW! I LOVE IT! i love poetry that is written from the heart and that poem was! great job!!!! why aren't there more men like you out there! you're gonna make some girl very happy! :)
867909
It looks great. It all rhymes and it flows very well. You  have done a nice job. The last paragraph -- move "and" to the second line to that beam and team rhyme. Your spelling and grammar are perfect.
802222
Honestly?  I think the poem is too gushy.  If you'd been dating for a while, it'd be great -- but from an anonymous person, the parts about "you're irreplaceable to me" and "my heart will never stop beating  . . ."  are a little creepy.\nI would change it to:\n\nWhen I think of the perfect girl,\nYou come instantly to mind\n\nWith the intellect of a genius,\nEyes that sparkle like gems,\nHair as soft as silk,\nAn angelic voice that sings beautiful melodies to my ears,\nCheeks as adorable and round,\nAnd a smile that lights up even the darkest room\nIt's obvious you are God's work of art\n\nYou're an amazing girl, an amazing person\nSo special to me\nAnd my heart beats gladly\nFor it lives off these feelings I have for you\n\nGood luck!
418336
in my personal opinion its a good poem but i find poems are always better when the person has experienced what they are writing about whether or not its racism, abuse or love and you obviously have some skills as a poet but i think you could reach your full potential if you write about something you have been through
1170485
you seem like a good writer although I'm not the one to critique you....my speciality is poetry-free verse form.  good luck.
259481
Wow, very beautiful and powerful.  I particularly love the first 3 lines as well as the lines about sending peace and love, but little hate or envy.  \n\nKeep on writing!  :)
666947
haha written just for you and thanks for another 2 pts. \n\ni wanted to write a poem to show you that i'm sorry\nbut my poor englsh is worst then dreaded cancers,\nso in order to appologise for my mistakes\nall i could do was ask yahoo answers,\nsome stranger wrote this poem for you\nbecuase i think as bad as i write,\ni just hope you will forgive me\ncause i do not want to fight.\n\n\ntada there you go :-)
781428
Wonderful poem.\nDont do what you suggest though it wont have the effect you will be hoping for. My suggestion is to talk to her and tell her you wrote this poem abuot her and recite it. Good luck
652071
a poem praising someone or something....maybe
331567
sounds good to me,  nice lil poem, good for a card.