Would this make a somewhat okay suicide message, I just wrote it ?
963490
By writing it in rhyme, you dilute the message, in my opinion.
512405
you son of a Bitch you stole my idea\n\nPS your target audience should be people who are about to commit suicide.
899821
I want you to remember something okay?  suicide is a permanent solution to a temporary problem.  no matter what the situation, it is not worth ending your life over.  and alcohol is only going to make things worse because it's a depressant.  so it's going to make you more depressed.  please leave it alone.  and please don't cut.  I know you feel like it helps, but in the long run it only hurts you.  you are worth so much more than you think you are.  and you matter.  sweetheart, God loves you, and He will give you the strength you need to get through whatever problems that you may face in your life.  and He will get you through this difficult time in your life now.  you say that you have no where to turn, and you can't get your medication.  the thing that you need to do right now is to go to the emergency room at the nearest hospital and tell someone that you need help and why you need it.  you won't be turned away in your condition.  they will get you the help that you need getting your medications and everything.  they will also appoint you a social worker who will help you and give you support.  your social worker can also help you by checking into places for you to live, getting your medications for you, and getting you into support groups where you can discuss your issues with others who are going through what you are going through.\nplease go to the hospital now, and ask for help.  just don't worry about anything, it will all be taken care of.  you just concentrate on getting better.\nand remember what I said, God loves you, and He has a purpose for your life even though you may not be able to see it right now.  you are loved.  and I will keep you in my prayers.
578109
oh, please don't consider this at all...it is an absolutely horrible thing to do. If you are considering suicide, there are hot lines to call and websites you can go to to get help. It may not seem like it, but there would be people who would miss you terribly. I read somewhere that people who try to commit suicide and don't succeed are glad they survived. It would be a terrible tragedy.
807283
It's interesting, as a poem I would have stopped at struggle to change as a song its fine to continue, Some grammatical and punctuation errors, I would accept it as a work in progress. :-) good luck and keep writing
1187101
Dear,\nwhatever you have written seem to be so baffling to me and i dont care what you do to me now because once you have hurt me and that is it.I know you dont regret anything and reading this i just feel that you are trying to be a script writer for a soap.It is stupid the way you say things again and again.Ao let us break up and never see again.Walk out of my life and please never look back
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I am completely for assisted suicide for the terminally ill.  If someone is so sick that thier quality of life is so bad that death is a release, so be it!  If suicide is used as a political statement ( such as hunger strikes and monks setting themselves on fire) I find that equally acceptable even rightious.  But if someone is going to kill themselves because they can't pay thier bills, or they are unhappy in thier marriage, I think that is cowardly... these are things that can be changed, declare bankruptcy, get a divorce... dont kill yourself!  If you are depressed, see a specialist, there are plenty of mood moderating meds available!
518559
I'd feel depressed. Well not like, OH MY! I'M GOING TO DIE, I'M SO LONELY!!!!! Not that kind of depressed. I'll feel left out, but I'll be okay. And if you went through that, I'm really sorry. And happy birthday..... if it is your birthday.
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avian flu\n\npig flu\n\nive been carjacked\n\nYou’ve been mistakenly arrested during a random bag check and transported to Guantánamo Bay, and this is your only phone call, but not to worry, you hope to have the whole thing cleared up by, oh, tomorrow.\n\nSorry but I won't be at work the next few months. You know how i'm in the reserves? We'll I'm being shipped of to Norrath in the morning for some U.N peace Keeping mission... \n\nHey boss, I'll be out of office this week, I'm going on a honeymoon with my wife, we just got married\n\nHey boss i can't work cause i...errrr... i died! Gottagobye! \n \nUm yeah...I've talked with some of my coleagues and we've determined my absence from work isn't a problem, it's a "feature". Thank you for employing me, have a nice day! *click* \n \n\n" My guns are telling me to stay home today". \n\nI've been promoted to Manager by our Supervisor, making you Assistant Manager, & I am now taking a vacation leaving you in charge...& don't look for the Supervisor to question my new promotion, he's gone scuba diving with brick shoes, mwa hahaha!...Scratch the brick shoes part, hehe, woops. \n\nIm having a religous holiday for the week. Im an Eekyoo Tooh Witness...yeah, & our long foretold prophecy is coming true, we'll be fulfilling our religious destiny...Witnessing Eekyoo Tooh. \n \n\nMy wife was in a horrible car accident....yes for the 15th time this year.... \n\n\nI just won a contest for a trip to an entirely different world.....so i'll be needing a few weeks off... \n \n\nI'm sorry, but I feel that my productivity levels will be low today. Would you rather not pay me for a day or pay me for not making my Quota, and depressing everyone around me? \n \nI'm sorry, I won't be available to work today. Oh, I'll be AT work.. with my girlfriend/boyfriend in the supply closet. Please observe the 'Do Not Disturb' sign on the door and don't check on us. We'll be fiiiiiiine. \n\nI can't come into work today. I have a fever of 85 degrees. \n\n(I tried that once many years ago with my father if I recall to avoid school. I for some reason had though 78 was the normal temperature. He calmly told me I was dead.) \n\nMe: "Hey boss, I need some time off. " \nBoss: "Why?" \nMe: "My wife in Everquest2 told me that if I don't spend more time with her, she will divorce me." \nBoss: "Oh, what about your real wife?" \nMe: "Didn't I tell you? She divorced me 4 years ago when EQlive came out because I didn't spend enough time with her." \nBoss: "Well for god's sake man, don't let this one get away! Take all the time you need." \n \nDigestive Issues" \nI can guarentee nobody wants details\n\nim sick\n\ni've been in a caraccident\n\nmy babysitter just quit\n\ni just had a misscarriage\n\nim hungover\n\ni just witnessed a robbery & will be at police station id ing the suspect
1070869
Welllll...I belong to a poetry workshop online, and if I reviewed your poem, I might say something like this: Your poem is filled with obvious pain and honest emotion, however I feel in some places your creativity is compromised by the rhymes...by which I mean you are stretching to achieve rhyme in places, using things that otherwise might not fit the best, like "hardware in his ears" and watching him like a "bear". The repetition of bloodstain and drip are a bit much. The image of red blood on your white shirt is good-you should play that up a bit maybe. Poetry is hard work-keep writing and good luck! And please don't cut yourself over a guy, or anything else, btw. I hope that part is just poetic license. :)
550032
i think i could report a few answers for assisted suicide, because you are suicidal and all, and you need help and a hotline.....maybe something like The Mentors, like when El Douche swallowed your cat and pissed on the crowd\n\nI'M NOT CRAZY, INSTITUTION. YOUR THE ONE THATS CRAZY! INSTITUTION! YOUR DRIVING ME CRAZY!
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hello sir\nmay i know where do you stay (live) please if you are in bangalore then i can surely help you\nbut you cannot do anything now you had a golden oppurtunity that you have missed it \nyou got that oppurtunity before or  on the day of writing exam if you think that you can improve yourself then you can definately go ahead \ni request you not to suicide with depression as you can imorove yourself this is a request as its a lot of waste for you and your family plz......\nI AM WITH YOU TO IMPROVE YOU \nALL THE BEST !!!!!!
64236
your making me cry! i hope you will be able to get through your situation. of course its hard to deal with and dont let others try to tell you to get over it. its good your expressing your feelings outwards. i hope you share what you wrote with others close to you. it might help a little more.
538234
No.  You are beyond help.\n\nYour life is over.
538865
I think it would be more meaningful if you wrote a song about the experiences of someone close to you instead of things that happened, or allegedly happened, to random people on the internet.  I think it's cool that you are into writing songs, though.  Good luck with that!
759034
I would want it in writing, OK?
1007914
Should we be worried about you doing something to yourself, or do you have a health condition that might cause your death?\n\nIf you're considering suicide, PLEASE speak to someone.