essay on kiran bedi as my role model?
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www.kiranbedi.com- First and Highest ranking Indian Woman internationally recognised, of Indian Police Service  \nKiran is known to be and the highest ranking and the only woman to have headed a ... Evidence shows that Kiran had introduced a "Godly approach to jail ...www.kiranbedi.com/igprisons.htm \nWikipedia: Kiran Bedi  \nKiran Bedi is an Indian police officer and is the first woman to join the Indian ... Kiran Bedi is the second of the four daughters of her parents, Prakash Lal ...en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kiran_Bedi
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http://career.berkeley.edu/Grad/GradStatement.stm\nhttp://www.cs.rpi.edu/~whuang/other/purposeadvice.html\nhttp://www.statementofpurpose.com/ \n\nThese are some of the sites that I am using right now for hints and advice to write an effective statement of purpose. I have a couple of things to say about your SOP. Don't write very big sentences. And you also have a few grammatical mistakes, \n\nFor example, instead of\n\nAs I have been brought up in a family which has strong inclinations towards development.\n\nI have been brought up in a family that has...\n\nMy father is a K.S (AVOID SHORT FORMS, WRITE WHAT K.S. STANDS FOR) officer WHO works for the development of rural areas.(BREAK SENTENCE) My mother, a teacher and social worker, HAS DEDICATED HER LIFE TO HELPING LESS FORTUNATE CHILDREN.\n\nI am not trying to discourage you - only trying to help. Review these sites, and make changes. Then email me your essay (scorpiodotcom@yahoo.com) as a Microsoft Word attachment. I will give you a detailed critique.
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hi vinay\ni'm 4m hyd, and im in CBSE too\ni chose human rights\n1) i spoke about definitions and history of rights --- INTRODUCTION\n2) talk about human rights organisation like the UNHRs, ASEAN, and others --- GOOGLE it\n3) talk about human rights charters like the UNDHR, the Aisan charter, the Human Rights Act (India) --- --- GOOGLE and http://www.nhrc.nic.in/\n4) Human rights violations: use the many case studies in the NHRC website above\n5) discuss apartheid --- wikipedia\n6) talk about nelson mandela and martin luther king jr\n7) discuss human rights violations under Indira Gnadhi\n8) use facts and figures from the Amnesty website http://www.amnesty.org/\n9) CONCLUSION --- write about world human rights day\n10) n u could also create a comparison between China and US in human rights\n\nmail me 4 more
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I agree that you should have something in there other than academic related material. People who give away scholarships want a well rounded individual not just someone who has done well in school. They want to know you excel socially also. What extra activities have you participated in: sports, clubs, jobs you've had for example. You say you want to give back to society. Well I feel the best predictor of future behavior is past behavior. What things have you done to already give back to your community? Anyone can write, "This is what I will do" however not many people can say, "This is what I have done and will continue to do." Dont get me wrong. I like your essay however if you want to win there needs to be more. Something on that paper has to catch someone's attention. Honestly, I feel what you have written will get lost amongst the other entries. They all will sound about that way. Have you thought about including personal stories about yourself within the essay?\n\nAnother thing, the following sentence you wrote doesnt totally make sense to me - "By informing the encouraged students of today and tomorrow, we are allowing for them to establish a better future for all mankind." Does encouraged students need to be informed or discouraged ones need to be informed? If someone is already encouraged arent they already informed? They already know what they need to know so they dont need encouragement. Discouraged individuals are those that need information. I could be reading this wrong, however, if I have a problem with that sentence someone else might also. Just something to think about. I like how you used the word catalyst though.... very good use of the word. Well with all that said, you did a great job on your essay. It is nothing to be ashamed of, however, if you want to win, there needs to be something more. I could be wrong though.... You never stated what the essay was suppose to encompass. Go to a teacher like another poster stated who has experience in regards to this scholarship. I could be totally off of what is expected of you. I hope what I stated helped....
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In all seriousness, you want some complete stranger to read and mark your essay, when this complete stranger may be eleven, may never have taught anything at all, may never have read Great Expectations, let alone studied it indepth, and won't know exactly what it is your teacher is looking for from you?\n\nWhen you say you did an essay on G.E., was it to do with how the story was written? To do with society at the time the book was produced? To do with how Charles Dickens constructs his characters and plot? What was the point of the essay, or the essay question in the first place? Just saying that it was about G.E. doesn't really narrow it down much.\n\nIn short, someone else has already said this: your best bet is to go back to the teacher and ask them what it was that was lacking. After all, what one teacher values, another teacher may find irrelevant, so the best advice in the world from someone else may gain you no extra marks anyway.
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start with the question \nwho is your best actor/actress\nwhich is the best film you propose not to miss./\n\nask them to write answers on a paper. advise them to hear your lesson first.\nthere after you 'll select the best entry submitted according to your taste and present them with a non fiction/book.likewise proceed .
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good luck to you I have a friend who is writing a thesis on some boring thing as you are \nthank you
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Check this out:\n\nhttp://essayinfo.com/essays/scholarship_essay.php
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http://www.free-essays-free-essays.com/dbase/7a/skx5.shtml
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learn her language for communication& study her culture too!\nhere : \nhttp://www.ic.arizona.edu/ic/babur/culture.htm
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Her opening sentence/paragraph should be about what her paper is about. Email me and I can help--I'm an English teacher.
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Wow...that would actually be a really cool essay to write.\n\nWhat class are you writing it for?  That might help you to decide what angle you want to approach it from.\n\nAll these men dedicated a portion of their lives trying to provide more equality for groups that suffered some form of societal injustice.  However, each man had a very different approach regarding how to achieve this.  You could talk about their relative strategies and the effectiveness of these strategies.
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Contact Muslimah.\n\nHere is a link to her 360:\n\nhttp://360.yahoo.com/profile-Gbugcj8kaKUOWLuNVYyPQnw-?cq=1
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my mom, after everything she's taught me about life and the things that she has gone through and overcome, it's hard not to think of her as my role model. \nI just hope I can be half the woman/mother she is.
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no i think you should introduce yourself as in like write up what you are going to talk about in the persasive essay and then iyt will be very esay to start up the paper:)
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Here is a Malaysian site that will get you started.\n\nhttp://www.kjc.gov.my/english/education/climate/climate01.html\n\nREMEMBER - use the information that is available on the websites as a starting point for your project. \n\nDon't resort to wholesale copying of the content - if you do that the following will happen: \n\n- your own intellectual abilities will not develop to their fullest.\n- even if you win the prize promised to you by your father, you will not gain complete satisfaction, becuase deep down inside you know that you have cheated.\n- you will accumulate bad karma (see the case of poor Kaavya Vishwanathan!!!!!!!!)  \n\nGOOD LUCK with your report.
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If it's an essay then i recommend u these 2 sites they will help u alot to tell u about Prophet Mohammad and Prophet Jesus peace be upon them :)\nwww.islamtomorrow.com\nwww.prophetofislam.com\ntake care and good luck with ur essay ;)