College Essay Help!? I need some help editing my college essay, can anyone suggest ways of improvement?
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First of all, I'm assuming that this is to get into college.  Your first sentence is ok but something a little more exciting would help to make somebody want to read your essay.  And you want to talk about yourself unless you are tyring to get your sister into school.  Stop saying "we" and start saying "I."  Please go to a different college than your sister.  It will help you out in life so much.  Even if you are so happy with her now, when you "grow up" you will be thankful that you are an individual, not a duplicate.  Colleges don't care how similar you are to your sister.  They want you to shine.
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When you are writing an essay, pay much attention for the following matters because they are very important to an essay.\n\n1) To create a good essay, the writer should read widely and practice to write essays regularly.\n \n2) What is intended in any essay is your individual impression of the subject rather than what others may think about it.\n \n3) A little individuality is very essential to a essay.\n\n4) Writer must express what he knows clearly and try to capture the attention of the reader.\n\n5) When you attempt to create an essay, you should draw your attention on the following matters carefully.\n\n 1) Choice of the subject.\n2) Outline( planning)\n3) Models\n4) writing
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Hi Pinky -- I already helped you rewrite that other long paragraph yesterday (and I see you've used my edits here in those last two paragraphs). Why not look over the types of changes I made to your previous paragraph and take a first stab at fixing the same types of issues here?
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Use an outline. Ask anyone who knows anything about Rome how and then your essay will be organized, trust me, all you need is an outline. It looks like but isn't extra work, it's help..
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Is this a big essay? if it is, Talk to your professor to try to extend deadline...at least for you. as for the essay, try asking your library, ask them for any sources that will help you in that area, and also your history professor as well your English professor.
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Hmm... I think someone needs to write their own college entrance essay.
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I would love to help you. Along with your essay, make a small project like a tree, and how each BRANCH(get it) works. Unfortunatly, You waited until last minute. I have done that; it is not the way to go
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Develop your own essay writing strategy \n\nFocus on the essay title \n\nDo multiple drafts. \n\nDo not pad. Try to ensure that everything you include is relevant to the essay title. \n\nInclude other opinions. Show that you have considered different sides to the question by discussing points of view that contradict your own. \n\nShow what you have read. \n\nWrite simply. \n\nUse technical terms correctly. \n\nFully reference what you write. \n\nPlan to finish your essay ahead of time.
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Here are some broken into categories like personal growth, etc...:\nhttp://collegeapps.about.com/od/collegeessay/a/essaysamples.htm\n\nmore essays & tips on writing them:\nhttp://www.collegeboard.com/article/0,3868,5-26-0-108,00.html\n\nMore essays & help based on the type of school:\nhttp://www.accepted.com/college/sampleEssays.aspx\n\nGood luck!
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What's with the lack of capitalization, the extraneous period, and the errant apostrophe?  Can WHAT help WHOM on getting to college?  And do you mean, "INto college?"
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You may want to look at a helpful web site for "How to write an essay." It is\nwww.english.bham.ac.uk/staff/tom/teaching/howto/essay.htm \n\nI found it very interesting, may be it can help you.\nCordially,\nIndia.Magica
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I hope you don't want someone to write your essay for you because that's just lazy. Here's a link to a webpage to various webpages that may help with your paper. Another great source: the library!!
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Write your own essay..
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Master the standard format for "the five paragraph essay."  Know it backwards and forwards and stick to the formula.  Clearly expressed thoughts, coherently presented and purposeful  is more important than tossing in hastily acquired vocabulary.  When given a topic choice, go for the one with which you are most familiar.  Check this link and good luck.  And, read, read, read. If you can enlist help, ask somebody to read your practice essays who can be critical and honest.  \n\nhttp://www.geocities.com/SoHo/Atrium/1437/index.html
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The key to writing an essay is inspiration and structure. Assuming you have a topic, gather what information you can about it, allow your mind to explore the boundaries of that information and see what intersts you about it, then write down a list of those things in th eorder that they appear to be connected. Think of how you can interst your reader in that subject, a catchy title and a few words of introduction. Then work your way through each of your main points (depending on essay length there shouldn't be more than three or four) saying something engaging about each. Now think how you can wrap up what you are saying to finish off with a neat ending. For me the ending always referred back to the introduction in some way and included the words of the title. That brings the whole to a satisfactory conclusion in arounded sort of way. You have posed a question for your reader and and answered it. Try to vary your sentence lengths so as not to be too clunky and keep the language simple. Use of long or obscure words may seem clever at first sight but if they are not in common use can look like bragging - and if you get the wrong meaning of them will only make you look silly. Write in a manner that can be easily read aloud without tripping over or hesitation and you should do well. Good luck - essay writing was my favourite.... And remeber to check your spellings!
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usually that's what u put.. but sumtimes it depends on the college ur applying to.. if u apply online.. they just ask u to paste ur essay on the designated essay box... \nread the instructions.. it shud be  mentioned there.. if not.. then just use ur usuall header
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These guys can help or at least point you in the right direction: www.wordtechs.com. They were lots of help to me, made many a college paper shine. They do all kinds of writing. Also, only a few dollars and quick turn-around.\n\nGood luck!\n~Tia~