Does my opening sentence reflect the rest of my paragraph appropriately?
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good start and you are on the right tract good luck with your report
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I have a couple grammar suggestions for you:\n\n- I'm not sure if this happened because of Yahoo or if you typed it in this way, but you should only have capital letters at the beginning of a sentence or for proper nouns (like for a person's name, or for a place name like "Paris", or for a product name like "Colgate").\n\n- Also, punctuation is VERY important.  If you don't clearly punctuate your writing, it is hard to understand.  For example, make sure that you have periods at the end of each of your sentences so that readers will know where one thought starts and another thought begins.\n\nIn terms of the clarity of this paragrpah, I here are my thoughts:\n\n- Figure out what the main thing that you're trying to say in this paragraph is, and make sure to state that CLEARLY in your first sentence.  This helps the reader to know what to expect to read in the paragraph.  Based on what you're writtetn, in sounds like your main point is something about how advertising, especially TV advertising, has the potential to influence people's behavior.  I would use the next few sentences to explain, generally, how television advertisements have the potential to influence people (I would do this by explaining how advertising companies target certain ads to certain audiences during certain programs, etc).  I would then say "For example..." and use your example of the Colgate commercial having the potential to influence a child to behave like the child he or she saw in the commerical.  I would then suggest that you have a sentence at the end of your paragrpah that conlcudes your ideas and helps to prepare the reader for what he/she will read in your next paragraph (if there is one).\n\nHope this helps!!
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Carefully.\n\nIt will help to be grammatically correct as well as comprehensive. \n\nI'd suggest starting over, the way Billy Madison did.
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Yes.\n\nIt's used in the sentence that you posed as a question.
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one about correct comma placement?
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It is correct in spoken English as well as written English(firstly and secondly etcetra should be used mostly when you're asked things to be told in direct points only.Otherwise I'd suggest that you go towards a more creative aproach in handling it if you're writing a story, essay..... or atleast try to disguise the firstly and secondly point like -\n\nThe the time was near and first and foremost I had forgotten to get the dinner ready.The second thing which worried me was that my right eye would start twitching madly if I didn't do anything properly.....\n\nSee how creative you can get!!!)
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My suggestion is to begin the essay with the opposite point of view (from yours).  Use the additional paragraphs to discredit that argument.
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The sentence "I watched figure skating yesterday." is just fine.  Well, done.  Don't listen to all the other people that want you to change it to make it all complicated and serious sounding, they're just trying to sound intelligent.  There's absolutely nothing wrong with writing simple sentences when you're just learning a language.\nWhat is you first language anyway?  You seem to know English pretty well so far.
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If it is the first word in the beginning of a sentence.
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The statement number 1 is grammatically correct.\n(Other answerers - To be grammatically correct, a sentence should not be meaningful -- Consider this: I saw some cars flying near the bottom of the Pacific Ocean when I was eating iron sheets)
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It is common structure. I don't think it is overly wordy. In common conversation or informal writing, it would be fine. If it is for formal writing, I would remove the suggestion portion and make it a more commanding statement.
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I believe the rule of thumb is to not have more than 3 separate parts to any sentence.\n\nYour sentences make enough sense, but remove the word "has" between "light" and "changes".or change "changes" to "changed to".\n\nThe last sentence has more than 3 parts so I suggest you make 2 sentences out of that group of thoughts, somehow, with "Of course, I understand. Though, it may be hard to explain."\n\nThe next sentence makes sense, but is missing a "d" in the word "crowded".\n\nRetarded is the correct spelling of that word.\n\nLet's say you could light 3 candles with one match, but you have 5 candles. You'd have two too many candles to light with one match.\n\nI used to refuse to do my own English essays, although I knew I could get a much better grade, simply because I didn't like the teacher nit-picking.  Like i just did ... lol\n\nI hope you do much better than I.
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the paragraph seemed fine to me except your spelling errors. i would use spell check
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Because the sentence structure police will get you. But really as long as it is in informal conversation it is ok. In business documents or something for school it better be correct.
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A would be the best answer.  Starting the sentences with the same noun is too repetitive.
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starting with a quote is always good, make sure it relates to your paper.\n\nor you could say "(subject) and (subject) seem to be very alike in many ways. However, they are actually very different."\n\nhave fun!
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Her opening sentence/paragraph should be about what her paper is about. Email me and I can help--I'm an English teacher.