Constructive critisism on this paragraph please?
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First of all this is 4 paragraphs, but I'll give you my criticism anyway.\n\nThe line "Where's ---" should probably be "Where's --,"\n\n"cut off" should be "cut-off"\n\nThe phrase "being tied to his mouth" implies the wrong action.  I would use "being tied around his head."  Honestly, I'd restructure this sentence altogether since it is using a weak passive construction (the word "by").\n\n"Littarly" is spelled wrong.  Should be "Literally."\n\nMy overall impression of this excerpt isn't great.  Because it's pulled from something larger, the references are ambiguous making it hard to give an accurate reading.  Two things in particular that you may want to change is the use of the word "Literally" as it is defined as physically seeing you character in hell and the the overly simple last sentence.\n\nJust a reminder that this is purely criticism and should not be taken to heart.  In the end, you are the artist and can do anything you want to.
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Yeah........but have already posted my opinions before...so kind of tired now ..:-)\n\nI will let somebody else have a go :-)
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been nowhere, did nothing, stole the t shirt.\ncome to the dark side, we have cookies.\nback with a vengence... and a mug of cocoa.\nsaw it, wanted it, threw a tantrum, got it.\na pat on the back is only a few centimetres from a kick up the backside.\nof course i dont look busy, i did it right the first time.\nalways remember that you're unique, yust like everyone else.\ni started out with nothing and still have most of it left.\nDo unto others…then run.\nYes I missed you. But my aim is improving.\nSupport your local medical examiner - die strangely.\nThe main reason Santa is jolly is that he knows where all the bad girls live.\nLife’s a beach, and then you drown.\nLife in a vacuum sucks.\nGot kleptomania? Take something for it.\nRomans didn’t find algebra challenging because X was always 10.\nLife’s short and hard - kind of like a bodybuilding elf.\nTwo wrongs don’t  make a right, but three lefts do.\nI’m not afraid of the dark…it’s the stuff in the dark I’m afraid of.\nEven if the voices aren’t real, they come up with some good ideas.\nRock is dead…long live paper and scissors!
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Dude, I've read your question like 6 times and am still confused. How about correcting the grammar and spelling, then forming cohesive sentences.
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I like it! \n\nMake sure you have the references to back your points, otherwise it may be just opinion. \n\nOne problem is that it seems unfinished. (I want to read more, hence my bias.) This is probably because the last paragraph is a series of questions which leaves the reader wanting more. \n\nIf it's not too late, here's some extra things for you to consider. What about deaf people who use sign languages? Only about 30% of the meaning conveyed is in the hands, the other 70% in the face and shoulders. Such people would fit in under the title of the article, the face of diversity. Deaf cultures, and so on. \n\nTo me, this is a good start for an article, but as such, it is unfinished.
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Passing over the misuse or grammar I believe that you have a good article. You have still been able tog et your point across. Congrats
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It is not a sentence...\n\nBeneath the noted universal concerns there lies a distinctive world view.\n\n Or better yet use a semi colon after the word preceeding but ..then replacing it with however and a comma...like this \n\n" ; however, beneath these universal concerns there lies a distinctive worldview."
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Summarizing each paragraph as a simple sentence:\n\nPeople in America are fatter today than they have ever been.\n\nPundits keep trying to tie this phenomenom to a ressurgence in historical interest in the reign of King Henry VIII, who was VERY fat, but just wanted to live life to the fullest.\n\nThe author doesn't believe in the Plantagenet/obesity connection.\n\nNeither should you.
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wat is zis man? cant understand a shit of what u've written.. get some punctuation in
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It is with great trepidation I discuss the creation of the new nation.  It's current recreation is fornication which has lead to drastic dehydration and procreation.  We need to find a location for the re-hydration station as it's current situation is in need of relocation.\n\nI've done the paragraph and I am filled with humiliation at the state of my exultation.
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So far so good. I like the quotes. I don't understand them all but very thought provoking.\n The color scheme is good. i thought the pictures were just ok. Overall very good start.
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yes, the punctuation is correct, however the sentence is very informal, so if it is for an essay I'd change it to make it more formal.
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Hi Pinky -- I already helped you rewrite that other long paragraph yesterday (and I see you've used my edits here in those last two paragraphs). Why not look over the types of changes I made to your previous paragraph and take a first stab at fixing the same types of issues here?
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The first statement is well written\n\nthe second is poorly constructed and hints of being aggressive...
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It's interesting, as a poem I would have stopped at struggle to change as a song its fine to continue, Some grammatical and punctuation errors, I would accept it as a work in progress. :-) good luck and keep writing
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All right, I must admit you have made your point very clear!\nLikewise your wording is quite sound.\nPerhaps we must give it a second thought and \nElaborate the other way around as well\nReally do you want to get it right?
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Question needs to be cohesive.