What do you think of this song I wrote. Help Finish it?
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As they raised their caps and smiled with glee\na familiar face was what i needed to see\ni wanted to make you happy\ni longed to make you proud\ninstead you stole my celebrations\nripped my heart out from my soul\nnow im embarking on a journey\nthat will help me understand\nwhy you didnt come to save me\nwhen my world came crashing down
941139
"What Would You Do" by City High. Someone asked about it yesterday too. Interesting.
767459
hey there are some errors...i think u were in hurry so never mind..well for first try its great thats what i think...i will deffinately look forward for ur next poem..
544624
Very good. I personally would use another word for "tear" in the line "The smoke stings my eyes, and makes me tear" because it just sounds too convenient. I would use "aware." Other than that, I would never have guessed you were 12 when you wrote this. Do you have music for it?
538865
I think it would be more meaningful if you wrote a song about the experiences of someone close to you instead of things that happened, or allegedly happened, to random people on the internet.  I think it's cool that you are into writing songs, though.  Good luck with that!
970500
A bit repetitive, but then lots of songs are.\nIf you penned it, keep it up. Everyone starts somewhere.
147719
I think its about the emptiness of life. its written in a flow of consciousness so maybe he was confused and lost while writing the song. try listening to tori amos's version of it.
1129277
Oh my gosh!!!!!!!!\nThat's is a way better song than what I wrote.\nI love it!!!!!!!!!\nWhat's your inspiration for this song?\nLove it!\nLove it!\nLove it!
881771
ummm...is it a new or old song?....what genre?...give us more info if you can...
538620
i love it, i'd suggest some sort of steel-drum thing, tho i dont know any names of songs, sorry!
490005
And i'm so sick of love song.... so said and slow... so sick of wishing... you were still here.\nAnyway, sorry i duno the answer to your question but i felt like singing that song.
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Found someone working on a complete song list...\n\nLinked below.
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Title: Artist: LESS THAN JAKE Song: Motown Never Sounded So Good Album: ANTHEM\nID: 45343\nDate and time (posted): 2004-08-02 13:26:47\nTo comment on this (Or read other comments), Please scroll down  \nMotown Never Sounded So Good lyrics\n\n\n[Roger:] \nSo you say, all your white flags are up and that you've had enough and that you were tired of collecting dust, you say everything always looks the same and you made your brand new face to match your brand new place, you say all your distress calls have gone out and your ship is going down \n\n[Pre-chorus] \n[Chris:] \nWell I say it to myself all the time, \n"Stop living half and a life and stop feeling like I'm half alive." \n\n[Chorus] \n[Roger:] \nI can't get enough, I'm not satisfied, I've wasted my time with this daily grind, in single file line, is this real life, I've been telling myself sometimes, what matters is on the inside. \n\n[Roger:] \nDo you remember when we had all the answers, and can you really remember when we wished for anything better, just to feel like it's been forever, does it feel like a broken record, a head full of yesterdays, you keep wishing your life away, you can't keep looking over you own shoulder, things'll never look up unless you start to move forward. \n\n[Pre-chorus] \n\n[Chorus] \n\n[Chorus 2] \n[Roger:] \nI can't get enough, I'm not satisfied, I've wasted my time with this daily grind, I can't get enough, I'm just getting by, I can't stand this design for our bitter lives, I keep feeling lost and I'm not satisfied with traffic and turnpikes and these tired eyes \n\n[Chorus]
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Hi there!\n\nSorry...I couldn't cut and paste the lyrics....there are some pretty bad words in it...I think you knew that...hahaha.  Hope this helps.  Here are some l inks anyhow...\n\n:-)
667141
I just downloaded this song this morning. Is it following me? Its a pretty good video. Pretty basic
1037550
Wow! I think that would make a really good song! Good luck with it. Hope to hear it soon.
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Here is a link to a number of opinions on the meaning of this particular song: