Hey! I SUCK at writting poems...But, I wrote one! CAN YOU EDIT AND GIVE ME YOUR OPINIONS? SeizeTheDay SaulBell
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How can you kill someone if they tell you to do your own homework? And you did the poem yourself, you didn't ask someone to do it for you.\n\nBut, yeah, the poem sounds great. Personally, I wouldn't change anything since poems are more artistic than being grammatically correct. If you feel that you got your artistic point across, then you don't need to change it.
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A real eye opener that chills you right to the bone. A harsh reminder why those sickos need to be stopped.\nIF this poem is regarding your own life then please seek help. Don't be afraid to tell someone, a teacher, a doctor, even a trusted aunt or other relative. They WILL take you seriously and something WILL be done. Telling someone and making it stop is surely better than continuing life as you are now.
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Dear Bearded One,\n\nI wrote you a poem in honor of your passing. Ok, not that you are dead....yet. Ok not that passing the stone will kill you either....most likely. Ok it could, but I doubt it. Unless it's a boulder. In that case, I'm sure surgery would be imminent. And since you are on here answering, I'm thinking no boulders. Ok, so in honor of your passing of the stone, I'm writing you a poem. Here it is: \n\n\nThere once was a man from Idaho,\nWho answered the questions of Jimbo,\nI noticed a few,\nI would laugh right on cue,\nTo the thought of dating a zombo!!\n\nI finally decided to answer,\nThis TMBG romancer,\nThe moon it was full,\nConversation never was dull,\nWith this Kimchee diet enhancer!\n\nBut then he fell ill with a stone,\n"I'm in pain!" he often would moan,\nHe gritted his teeth,\nBraced himself with his feet,\nAnd proceded to pass thru his bone.\n\nNow we all hope that he will be cured,\nHis Yahoo Answer friends are assured,\nHe will return a new man,\nWith a quest and a plan,\nTo convince Yahoo! Amy he's absurd.\n\n\nGet well soon, Bud!
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It's ok, but just not my style of poetry.\nIt needs to have a rhythm.\n\nIt might work better using the japanese haiku style.\n\nOk, I did just a slight altering. See if this works better.\n\nI really like sports football is my thang,\nAnd Peyton Manning is the man of the game. \n\nI love the colts  and you might be surprised, \nthat any girl on the planet likes to watch sweaty guys\n\nI really like football and someday I'll be\na pro football player on a pro football team.
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I love the poem.. made me kinda teary-eyed.\nThen when I read that you had not met the woman that you wrote it about till recently.. it made me sadder yet.\n\nShe will be sad reading it, knowing she just met you.\n\nMaybe she will be happy knowing you love her enough now to write it.\nWell written poem... very kid of you to write it for your mom.\n\nI am wondering if you remember staring at her... if you just met her.\n\nNice poem though.
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Good one :]\n\nBut one exception to your poem:\n\nI can't FORGET your funny poem.(My forgetter would become a little worse) :]\n\nHave a nice day :]
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You luuuuuv poetry thats for sure, to think of so much stuff is great. I like it however I find myself confused about the meaning. Are you making fun of passion or beeing coy? I think you are holding back! Don't be shy, there is alot of "passion" in your poetry. Don't hold back!
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the poem is very good!!!
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hey there are some errors...i think u were in hurry so never mind..well for first try its great thats what i think...i will deffinately look forward for ur next poem..
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Very nice...you little romantic.......a poem or a song?\n\nYou wrote this....I love it!!!!!
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Oh Yes ! Fully agreed ! My mind needs a Dry Cleaning or needs to be sent to Laundry !! It has become very dirty....especially after reading your poetry , except for the last stanza !!! You call it a Naughty ? I must say it was an erotic One !!!  Ha Ha Ha ....Nice one....Quite imaginative ! I liked it !
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nothing rhymes with orange\nsaid the sign beside my door hinge\n=)\n\nwords that don't rhyme: purple, pint, nothing, month\n\nI'm not in the mood to go hunting after the poem right now LOL let's see if someone else want it =)
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Although grammatically incorrect and lacking steady timbre, there is no doubt as to the feeling and emotion expressed in your poem. I don't know about your friend but if he or she read it I am sure that they would continue to be a friend for life. Good luck.
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You have very good meter. The words seem to roll effortlessly off of the tongue. KEEP AT IT. I love the rhymes. \n\nI also like the mood you set up with your words. To be very honest, your lyrics are much better than alot I have read. I am not just being nice, either.\n\nAs a songwriter/arranger/musician myself, it is refreshing to read a good piece of material. Like I said before, KEEP AT IT. Good job.\n\nPeace and chicken grease\nJon
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lol...that's so sweet...\ni dunno..mayb u can make one up based on any other poem,or just start from scratch?\ni just hope laura n corey culd live happily evr after!!gud luck!!
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well its good that u are putting ur emotions into poetry. its good karthasis.\nthe point of the poem seems to go a little askew in terms of imagery. in one sense u seem to be talking about nobody, then u jump to falling down. the transition isnt subtle enough.\ni also think u need to work on the rhthym of your poem. it's hard to get the right mood when reading it, if u've left this major component in poetry writing out. \nhope u dont get offended, i am simply trying to offer constructive criticism. i'd would have also like to have known, the title of your poem :)
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that poem was so sweet im crying now\n\nu would be a great poet u have got a good talent :) xx