does this sound OK and how can I shorten this??
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Two years? Two years isn't much at all.  Go talk to him in person.  It's too easy for his to just not reply to your e-mails.  \n\n\nYou forward me e-mail, but you can't reply to my e-mails or write me an e-mail yourself? \n\nYou hide from me. Why can't you just talk to me, and tell me "hey I'm sorry, but I don't want to talk to you anymore because of certain reasons", instead of just ignoring me? It makes it harder for me, and I never know, maybe something happened, and I don't know whether you forgot me already or something else and then you just send me a forward! I've never been in such a position, and I can't believe you already forgot about me and moved on. You changed my life and made me a different person, and then when you found out that I was a different person and that I was younger, you forgot all about me! I dont' really care about a persons age or how they look. What matters is that we get along, and I feel comfortable with them. Help me out here. At least tell me that you don't want anything to do with me so I can move on. Well, if you decide not to reply I wish you all the best in life and hope you get everything you ever wanted! But just for the record, I'm still here waiting, hoping that someday sometime somewhere we will meet again... and that time I hope we can start over and forget what has happened! I am sorry that I lied but I was put in a bad position and did not know how to react! \nBut, I do care about you.  I just want you to know that.
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It should be fine.\n\nQuestions?  Concerns?  Comments?  Email me through the link in my profile, and I'll get back to you as soon as possible.
807283
It's interesting, as a poem I would have stopped at struggle to change as a song its fine to continue, Some grammatical and punctuation errors, I would accept it as a work in progress. :-) good luck and keep writing
1182438
This is fine as it is. The few grammatical mistakes that there are just aren't worth correcting.\nGood job, and good luck on your speech!
699878
pretty much perfect, i would change only the following:\n\nI am [removed also.  no need for it, since you have not expressed any other concerns previous to this sentence.] concerned for the safety of anyone who may be in the building at other times. There are potential dangers in a building that is under construction, [add comma] especially if the construction crew doesn’t know you are in the building.\n\nIn order to be sure the construction crew is aware of your presence [you used the phrase "in the bulding" to finish the previous paragraph.  avoid repetition.], I am asking you to please [added please.  it's both cordial and professional to say please when requesting something from employees.]sign in with the security office during non-business [added hyphen] hours. In addition, the construction crew has requested that {added "that."  grammatical.] you use the front entrance, as opposed to the east or west entrances.\n\n\nhope this helps.
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Aaaa ... ok. Now I see the fine print. I was going to suggest you tweak your quote to something like, "to be a great speaker, you really need ideas." Maybe you can rework it in a clever way to include both ideas.
50829
just avoid it..\n\n(like i did for answering this question, hope there may be some spelling mistake.. nothing availbale with this spelling)
110514
I think you need to add some details
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It is too long to write/type all word down the small space here...\n\nI suggest U go to the following website:
303514
maina, is this correct plz choose me best answer
853407
say it an inderct way, don't make it sound too much serious although it is. best of luck.
1060820
Yes, it is absolutely ok...\n\nYou can take some notes from http://www.ratioworld.com\n\nIf u wud like any more info, include that in "Additional Info" and I'll answer u...
924194
It should be ok....\n\nps...i don't think you read my question right....please could you read it again b4 you jump to the wrong conclusion thank you....
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Do it yourself like I do. Don't be a lazy a$$.\n\nLove,\n\nWhitey
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It sounds fine, but is you WANT, you can make it like this (i didn't rewrite it, i took your words and added a period)\n\nIn the Novel Out of the Dust, Billy Jo faces many life changing conflicts. Some include guilt of accidentally killing her mother, horrible dust storms, and an unstable relationship with her father.\n\nThis has better sentence fluency that is all.\nAlso, it is FINE the way it is. UNDERLINE the novel, instead of just capitalizing it.
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go back to your introductory paragraph. You should be rephrasing the introduction to tie it all together.
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hey its good.  except you should get rid of the "hundred". and take "Kyoto" out of  the end of the paragraph and you could add "the" before regional. but it looks good. the best of luck on your test.