Poem would be based on the This is my rifle -\n\nthis is my burger it is my favorite burger there are many like it but this one is mine...\nwould it cause problems I don't want to get in trouble
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Whether or not the original piece is copyright-protected, there are plenty of cases indicating that the First Amendment preserves the right to borrow copyrighted material for the purposes of satire.  You are better off if you alter the poem to satirize its original content or author instead of to make fun of a totally different subject.  Generally speaking, though, imitating a copyrighted work for the purpose of satire is pretty safe.
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That was amazing. If you wrote this you have an immense amount of talent. You seem to know what you want to say and have a perfect way of putting in on a piece of paper. You should go to www.howtowritepoetry.com and enter it in their contest. I think that was a beautiful poem and you should continue writing because you have pure natural talent that i think people can relate to and are touched by because i know i was.
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All I came up with were these:\n\n"We are not enemies, but friends. We must not be enemies. Though passion may have strained it must not break our bonds of affection. The mystic chords of memory, stretching from every battlefield and patriot grave to every living heart and hearthstone all over this broad land, will yet swell the chorus of the Union, when again touched, as surely they will be, by the better angels of our nature."\n\nI"f I were to try to read, much less answer, all the attacks made on me, this shop might as well be closed for any other business. I do the very best I know how - the very best I can; and I mean to keep doing so until the end. If the end brings me out all right, what's said against me won't amount to anything. If the end brings me out wrong, ten angels swearing I was right would make no difference. "
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I loved this one...It's a very sweet poem about showing someone a reason not to take their own life .... Truly,Heart warming!!!! And I should know..I'm a  published Poet...It shows warmth and tenderness....It also lets me see inside your heart.And I see a warm,loving person..\n~hugs~
560342
Someone could read this and actually try it. That would be dangerous. i agree with the mcdonalds statement. Get a new hobby and new friends.
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I love the one that is a poem about the monster under the bed and hobbes saves the day by just being there (cause the monster didn't know there was a tiger in the bed).  Best Line: "Hey wake up you stupid cretin! Are you gonna sleep while I get eaten!?!?!?"  I'll check my collection books and see if I can find page number for the rest of ya.
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I think you should just change it a little.  I think you should have said a smile that lights up the room or a laugh that brightens your life.\n\nAnd don't worry not all poems rhyme.
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If u don't put that poem in a book , magazine.or something then u have a problem. I LOVE THAT POEM! It's like...... unexplainable. But i myself love it, i wish that i could find a intelligent,sweet, caring man like you. That is my wish. I wish you the best of Luck for who so ever you're with. She has no choice but to love!!!
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It's pretty good.  Did you come up with it? Maybe you can reword it to read...\n\n"Do not laugh at others failures when you're not courageous enough to tackle one"\n\nKeep the "one" the same and let it have the same meaning (failure).  I like how you used one as a metaphor.  It makes the quote a bit more profound.
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Being a poet myself, I have to say it's a good poem, but what it's saying is you are not really dealing with the pain and hurt too well. My heart goes out to you. I hurt for you, and also, identify with you. I'm compiling a book of my poems, called "Pain On Paper". The poetry for us is a release of our pain...........keep on writing! You're doing good! Talk to somebody though, a friend, a counselor.......\nSOMEBODY! Get the pain out!!
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sounds good to me,  nice lil poem, good for a card.
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Awesome and powerful  I like it.  It could be my life, and it certainly says how I feel.  Did you really write it?  If so, you shouldn't post it on here unless you already have copyright.
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Not sure, but you could check out my poems on my yahoo 360 \n\nand post a comment and vote for your favourite!!\n\nOh ok..try the links below as well!!\n\nGood Luck\n\nJimmy
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in my personal opinion its a good poem but i find poems are always better when the person has experienced what they are writing about whether or not its racism, abuse or love and you obviously have some skills as a poet but i think you could reach your full potential if you write about something you have been through
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It would help if you post the poem or a link to the poem.
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First of all this is 4 paragraphs, but I'll give you my criticism anyway.\n\nThe line "Where's ---" should probably be "Where's --,"\n\n"cut off" should be "cut-off"\n\nThe phrase "being tied to his mouth" implies the wrong action.  I would use "being tied around his head."  Honestly, I'd restructure this sentence altogether since it is using a weak passive construction (the word "by").\n\n"Littarly" is spelled wrong.  Should be "Literally."\n\nMy overall impression of this excerpt isn't great.  Because it's pulled from something larger, the references are ambiguous making it hard to give an accurate reading.  Two things in particular that you may want to change is the use of the word "Literally" as it is defined as physically seeing you character in hell and the the overly simple last sentence.\n\nJust a reminder that this is purely criticism and should not be taken to heart.  In the end, you are the artist and can do anything you want to.
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I would go to the store and buy a pack of cute stickers, (something you like -- flowers, cats, animals, stars) and when you sign your name, put the sticker next to it.  I wouldn't write a poem, I would write a memory that you have with that person, so that 10 years down the road, when they look at their yearbook they will remember EXACTLY who you are because of the fond memory you wrote down.  --