I am a senior it high school and i have an essay that i can do to win a scholorship ... its has to be a life story that includes goals and hopes for the future.. any ideas??? how do i satrt it off?? please help!
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tell them a story of a famous person and relate to ur life.  and then show similarities and end with what u want to do and why it is important.
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Go for it! YOu said so yourself, scholorships don't grow on trees! You'll kick yourself later if you don't at least take this chance and make everything of it that you can. Besides, your family can still visit you...and you can call them or whatever it's not like you never see or hear from them again...
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I would love to help you. Along with your essay, make a small project like a tree, and how each BRANCH(get it) works. Unfortunatly, You waited until last minute. I have done that; it is not the way to go
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First step:  Just jot down your ideas\nSecond step:  Try to connect common ideas into  paragraphs.\nThird step: Develop a good lead paragraph.\nFourth step:  Develop a good ending that summarizes your points.\n\nThoughts to consider:\n*  Clubs, activities, social events, etc.\n*  Leadership experience, i.e. club president.\n*  Volunteer in local community and/or church functions.\n*  Part-time jobs.\n*  Unique courses completed.\n*  What is your passion?  What do you really like to do?\nFor example, do you bake, run, draw?\n*  Do other students come to you for advice?  Do you mentor younger students?\n*  Have you had to overcome a difficult situation?  Maybe a handicap or discrimination?  What did you learn from that experience?\n*  What makes you different?  Stand out in the crowd?\n\nGood luck.  Just jot down ideas, and it will eventually all flow together into a good essay.  This is your time to brag about you!
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You should write your own essays.  Ask for specific information that you can integrate into your essay.
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first you have to get a good score on your ACT test. and if your out of state then you have to score well on your SAT. besides that don't try to write like me, they want good reasons, points, and other things in your essay that you will send them. your grades from highschool only represents what you are capable of at the moment, they really look at other things such as your extra curricular activities and how you manage to balance it with your academics. me and my friend got into michigan easily. the hard part is how long can you stay there without messing up and droping out.
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I still rely on one single thing to help me write the best possible essay I can . . . an outline. See, the problem with most essays is that the content is disorganized. You may have great ideas and facts that you want to write about, but somewhere during the writing process you start mixing them up. Suddenly your perfect paper sounds all wrong and you want to scream! I've found that the best papers I've ever written (meaning my A papers) have all started with a good, solid outline. Once you have an outline down, your paper writes itself. Your thoughts are organized and the teacher can understand your main point (which is your thesis) and how you supported that point. A focused paper is the key to writing a good essay. Here's the format for the outline I usually follow:\n\nI. Topic / Title\n\nII. Introduction of Essay\nA. Write a few sentences that lead into the main point of your essay\nB. End the paragraph with your thesis statement (3 main points you are going to support)\n     1. First point in thesis\n     2. Second point in thesis\n     3. Third point in thesis\n\nIII. Body of Essay\nA. Topic One - First Point in Thesis\n     1. Support your point with either quotations or solid evidence\n     2. Have at least five sentences\nB. Topic Two - Second Point in Thesis\n     1. Support your point with either quotations or solid evidence\n     2. Have at least five sentences\nC. Topic Three - Third Point in Thesis\n     1. Support your point with either quotations or solid evidence\n     2. Have at least five sentences\n\nIV. Conclusion\nA. Write a few sentences summarizing your essay\nB. Restate your thesis and how you proved your point\n\nOnce you fill in the blanks to this outline with your topic and information, the rest is easy! Make sure to check your spelling and punctuation, and then you're good to go!
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Take a deep breath and enjoy the summer.  You are obviously a driven individual.  The classes you are taking are good as wellas your involvement in sports.  Maybe spend some time this summer developing a community service resume.  Don't be scattered in your approach.  Find one item that you can work with and get in depth knowledge.  Use this knowledge on your college essay.\n\nAlso, whether you get into these schools or not will not matter or not many years from now.  Sometimes when God closes a door he opens a window.  My son did not get into his first choice.  He went to a fine small liberal arts school and studied religion and history (instead of the "big name" school where he would have studied business).  He had a wonderful 4 years, met many nice people, was able to continue to play Div 3 sports all 4 years and graduated with a history honorarium.  Also has a job if he wants but I think he'll continue and get a masters degree.\n\nHis small school was located in Ohio and many students go there as pre med or pre dentist.  \n\nThere is a place for everyone and life's too wonderful to stress over this.  Senior year will be long enough.  Do apply early decision to get the waiting over with!!
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This is a five paragraph essay outline, acceptable for most highschool applications\n\nIntroduction\n\n    -Introductory statements, state the problem, idea,etc\n    *Thesis statement (you know what this is right?)\n\nBody\n\n    -First supporting idea \n     *Transition into your topic sentence\n     *Use discussion, examples, and analysis to support what     \n      you are saying\n  \n    -Second supporting idea \n     *Transition into your topic sentence\n     *Use discussion, examples, and analysis to support what     \n     you are saying\n              \n    -Third supporting idea \n     *Transition into your topic sentence\n     *Use discussion, examples, and analysis to support what     \n      you are saying\n               \nConclusion\n\n    -Transition, then a statement that basically reiterates \n     your thesis\n    -Restate the key points (1,2,3 of the body)\n    -Then end with a summary or a conclusion, "to sum the argument..." or "this essay showed..." "You should agree with the argument because..." that sort of thing.
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Hey dude! Chill!\nYou can write on someone else's aim.\nConfused!\nSee, you can make an issue of this subject, you can tell everyone that in our education scenario why one's aims are asked.\nThe primary aim should be the same for younger generation to toil for the betterment of the nation.\nPutting such subjects in declamaitions and debates, the education scenario is feeding in the feeling of self indulgence and selfness in individuals. That may progressivebut full of self. At the initial level the topic for this essay or debate should be "How could my aim for life help my nation."\nSo with this you can prove that the topic is inappropriate and should be mended.\nBest of Luck.
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There are few gramatical errors --> "I know should never think of only myself" instead use something like " I know I shouldn't  think of only myself " or " I know I should think about others too." There is something missing in the essay. I am not sure what though. I think you need to use more "diffucult" words rather than simple ones. I really love your starting and your ending but the middle needs a little perfection. Right now your essay according to me is 7/10 which is great. But using more "difficult" words yet understandable would really make your essay stand out. I think you should also add why you can't be what you want to be and what's that proffesion that you want to be. Avoid using words such as "cool", they bring the quality of your essay down. And being nurse doesn't mean you don't have problems. Infact, nurses can get in lots of problems, such as people can sue you for stupid stuff. I volunteered in a hospital last summer and they wouldn't let us touch patients AT ALL. We had to call professionals because they could sue us saying that while helping them we caused a bruise or whatever and now they are in terrible pain and blah blah blah but back to your essay. "I’m a teenager; I should enjoy life and have fun. Isn’t I’m being too stubborn, too selfish to think like that?" make this statement more clear im not sure if i am understanding what you are saying but i get the idea.  "I know that it’s my responsibility not to take my studies for granted." It's not your responsibility. You are making it sound like studies is a job or something. Not exactly what your teachers want to hear. Use more like "I know that studies should not be taken for granted" or maybe " my studies are important and serious to me". "because if it wasn’t for them I won’t be able to grow like this." use "because if it wasn’t for them I would not have been the person i am today."  " I should be greatful to have a family who cares and love me." make it sound you are grateful so use "I am grateful to have a family who cares and loves me."
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First of all, I'm assuming that this is to get into college.  Your first sentence is ok but something a little more exciting would help to make somebody want to read your essay.  And you want to talk about yourself unless you are tyring to get your sister into school.  Stop saying "we" and start saying "I."  Please go to a different college than your sister.  It will help you out in life so much.  Even if you are so happy with her now, when you "grow up" you will be thankful that you are an individual, not a duplicate.  Colleges don't care how similar you are to your sister.  They want you to shine.
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start writing on the computer. keep writing until you have said everything you want to say. then go back over an read it. move things around into the position you want then use the rules for a standard essay. Its easy and fast. I got Through college doing it myself with honors no less.
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Get involved in your community! Join clubs and volunteer. Also, keep a decent GPA of course and score well on the SAT/ACTs. However, community and organizational involvement ARE important. Your essay is also important. Colleges DO read them!!! Rather than trying to be an "individual" in your essay, try to be a good writer. Write truthfully, and address weaknesses on your application in a personal statement. Also, contact the colleges you are considering and ASK what their entrance requirements are and if they have minimum scholarship requirements, etc.
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well i know others say think of someone but actually for me its easier to write a bs paper anyway. pick someone like your parents, older sibling or someone who is doing good in their life. if its true or not start off by explaining what they do that is so great in your eyes that they have caused you to follow in their foot step. talk about how if you get "down" or "unmotivated" what they do to you to pick you back up. maybe bs and say something like you didnt want to go to college but because of them and the goals they have accomplished gave you the drive to keep going. \njust dont stress and make up stuff as you go along. (no one will know if it is true or not) hope i helped...good luck
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Bradford,\n\nNot trying to be mean ,but if you took some of the time that you spend online each day and worked on your paper you could get it done. As a senior, it is time for you to learn to prioritize and budget your time. If I've learned anything about success it's this --- It isn't the most intelligent or talented people who are successful but those who set goals , plan to reach those goals, and put forth maximum effort to work their plans. \nLike I said I'm not trying to be mean to you but you seem like an intelligent young man (attractive too) so I thought I'd share that with you.
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When you look back in history, you will find that people who share your disposition were generally on their own to pave their own road.  I, personally, think that is one thing that has not changed at all.  Not until there's a different foundation under our feet.\n\nI would recommend to you that you formulate long-term goals for yourself and then shorter ones to get you there.\n\nReally focus in on a couple of your ideas, keep the journal alive, but really set out to bring a few of them to life.\n\nSince you dropped out of college, it may not make sense for you to go back in and get your degree just to climb the ladder and all that nonsense to try to get to where you want to be.  It sounds like you create your own education for yourself, which is all you could really aspire to Learn in college or high school anyway.\n\nSorry, I'm thinking outloud, but I think you should go Further Into whatever it is you're doing; don't worry about jobs and careers that much, because if you get focused and devote yourself, your job will follow and you'll be well into your career.\n\nRemember your Conscience and good luck making the World the best place you can.